Thank you very much for letting us all know that you are retiring from . Although it is sad to see you go, I am glad to know that you are more concerned with the real world and I wish you the best.

I do have one question however, will you be updating to let us know if someone has adopted any of your stories?

-Spider's Claw
P.S, Glad to see you announcing your leave rather than leaving all your fans hanging for years.

PLEASE UPDATE!

I really, really like this! Update please?

lol i love the end so much "there will all ways be consequences tim all ways"

Woah, interesting. I really like this story. However I'm a little curious of whitch Splinter this is (becasue I guess that's him)

Because he calls himself Hamato Yoshi (80's Splinter's real name) But he calls the turtles his sons, and that he doesn't do in the 80's version. So I'm just a little curious since it's not clear.

(Also I hope this story is not dead, because I really like it.)

Is it Splinter? Or Leo?

This is an interesting story so far. I'm curious as to where you intend to go with it.

There is something in the previous chapter you should fix, or at least clarify. I'll repeat part of the line, and explain the problem.

"I was still in a little bit of denial as he looked at the strange man standing in front of me..."

The 'he' is not very clear. If you are referring to Tim, it should be 'as I looked at' rather than the 'he.' If you mean Bruce, please say 'as Bruce looked at.' You create confusion when you are not specific.

Also, I'm pretty sure that it is one 'm' in 'Hamato.' I could be wrong, but I'm pretty sure I'm right. When pronounced, it's 'ha-ma-to,' which to my Japanese class says that it is just three hiragana - 'ha', 'ma', and 'to.' If it were 'hammato,' it would sound like 'ha-ma-to,' with a slight stress on the 'm', and have a small 'tsu' between the 'ha' and 'ma' to indicate an extra letter when translated into romanji. (Sorry, I couldn't help myself with this.)

I'd like to make a few suggestions on your general writing. I'm not trying to criticize you here, but I think you could write more on what exactly is happening. For instance, in your first chapter, I would've liked to see what happened between Splinter showing Tim that he DID need the training and getting into his room.

Another problem is with your plot. I'm not saying it's bad, don't get me wrong, but it needs some work. In other words, I'm saying you have a few plot-holes. For instance, while I would assume you mean that Don wanted to take on-line classes at MIT, you don't say that explicitly. Therefore, I'm left to wonder how Don would attend regular classes. That is one of your plot-holes.

Another is how Splinter would decide to get a job. It seems a little shaky to me, if you will. After spending all of his time in the sewers, I would think it would take him a little longer and much more internal debate before he finally decides to get a job. Again, it makes logical sense from our perspective, but for him, it's a little odd for him to go from 'I can't borrow from you' to 'I'm going to get a job.'

My suggestion for the first is to simply say that he was hoping to take on-line courses. That solves that one simply.

The second issue is a little trickier. I'd suggest going back and putting in a 'long pause' before Splinter says, "There is only one thing for it. I shall find a job."

Another thing I just thought of is that you should explain WHY Splinter thought Don's dream was important enough to do this for him. While yes, he is talented, there is a lot more here than just money.

I'm sorry to be such a nit-pick, but I want you to know that I also see the promise of this story. You have a great and interesting idea, and I just adore how Splinter caught Tim trying to sneak into his room to prank him. I can't wait to see where the next chapter takes us.

~Star~

Great idea for a crossover. I can't wait to see where you take it. Sorry, it's late and I can't think straight, or I would say more.

Really hope you continue this story! It is such an interesting idea!

that was a great ch.

in response to your, i guess talking, b4 the ch. dick in the b:tas is a young man and is in college so the younger kid that would need the help would b tim

but if ur talking bout the batman dick is just a kid

i hope this helps

ok so if were talkin bout the person training robin then im guessin splinter but if were not and its the person on the other end of the phone line then im guessin one of the turtles mikey, leo, donnie, or raph, but if were not talkin bout either of em then i have no clue.

hope u update soon :)

very interesting story and i cant wait for u to finish it :]

I read your note, congrats on your son! :)

I would like to read more of this story but, take your time, just having a nephew in my house has made ME hectic so, I can only imagine how much harder it is for a new mother. This story is off to a good start, I will deffintly be watching for a update!(if there is one)

UPDATE! *innocent puppy dog pout look* PWEASE? *hard glare* OR ELSE I WILL HUNT YOU DOWN! MUAHAHAHAHA

...SARAH! I THOUGHT I TOLD YOU!...no more threatning the fanfic writers!

...um...Not too? *innocent puppy dog pout look* I DIDNT DO IT!

...Uhuh...ANYWAYS...what sarah is TRYING to say is, we love this fic and we want you to keep updateing! :)

Update soon

i think it is someone from TMNT but i dont know who