wow... great job.. you are a fantastic writer... l loved the way you portrayed Raito in this fic... he is soooo cuteeeeand l loved the idea of sticking to the canon, and giving them a chance in afterlife...

And yes l was reduced to tears at the linesHe took control for enough to grin malevolently down at the prone detective as he rasped his last breath, eyes stark with shock at the pain he felt and the betrayal of the one who supposedly loved him."..."Waves of unadulterated pain washed over Raito, accumulating in a bloody head and released in an unholy shriek, a shriek such as he had not known he could make. And then it was through. Raito died."...
thanks for writing such a masterpiece, and sharing it with us readersBest wishes
MK

This is actually a really cool route because it is after canon so artistic license galore, they couldn't be together in life so a chance in the afterlife, way to go making this happen. I was worried because I couldn't figure out how the heck there could be a happy ending if L was dead.
(Does that have anything to do with the fact that I'm now lying here naked and unable to move?")
Embarrassed L was fun to watch, nice one Raito.
(And even after I killed him, killed him for crying out loud… even now he still… The thought burnt in his brain, scalding him internally and nearly wrenching a shriek of agony from his mouth.)
Oh man, when L explained his truth, that was romantic as fuck and Raito's agony/remorse afterwards was glorious. Thank you for writing and for making them work, that was an epic journey.

This is a fucking tragedy. So maybe L always liked Raito but it was always in the background and if so the miscommunication is tragic because Raito misunderstood but damn L, you couldn't try being non ambiguous for once? I was left in tears lol

(He wouldn't have minded going for a walk with the detective either. Or just going somewhere with the detective. In more ways than one.) 8D
(What was that? His conscience and self-control smacked his cowering libido back into the corner of his skull and glared threateningly at it.)
Ah, poor Raito's libido. Him being transfixed by L's smile made me smile, as for the attention they are garnering, I'm glad I'm not them lol.
(Thankfully, he was able to control his delight long enough to re-establish his normal posture, much to his spine's sorrow.
...
Teased? Maybe he actually needed to see a doctor. This was getting obscene…)
I am really enjoying your sense of humor :D Also, what doctor would you see Raito? I am giddy Raito was moved by L's sadness and bought L something, that's cute.
(Judging by the fact that even more people were staring at him, Raito began to consider the fact that he might have been wiser to lower his voice in making that little statement. Hm. Hindsight is a wonderful invention. As is self-control.)
Wow, his declaration was something else. I really like your Raito and his honest moments :) Nice cliffhanger

I am actually pretty proud of Misa for coming to the conclusion she did and making L's plan backfired, hilarious hahaha
(...hang on a minute. He couldn't even remember which one he had started off describing now.) xD
Wow, I feel bad for Raito, he is not taking possible rejection well at all, almost blindsided since if L seemed jealous maybe there was hope? Dang.
(Hang on a minute. He hadn't answered the question about having a licence either.) D:
(Oh good lords… he was not cut out for that kind of offer!) Oh what fun it is to laugh at Raito and awkward circumstances sometimes lol
Raito freeing the hair from L's mouth was sweet. Another lovely chapter.

(A slab of confectionary, a book about the darkest side of humanity, and a possible (though accidental) concussion to his only love interest.) This is a great line haha Your Raito's thoughts are full of many great lines haha

Lol, that last scene. Raito being happy to help L out was cute. I like Misa's gratefulness and mindfulness.

"Oh. Good. Lord." I laughed but I'm not sure if Raito will come clean. Wow, while nice they got him cake, I'm at a lost at why they couldn't get him real food too...maybe time constraints. Raito should ask his dad for jerky for nuts he can stash to snack on. Damn L is a great actor. Wtg Raito sloshing tea on him for being a jerk :D

Raito backtracking whenever he notices things about L that he doesn't like noticing is pretty endearing haha Holy crap, L managed to charm Raito yeah? Long eyelashes, lips the palest of pinks ::waggles eyebrows::

The foreign land being the real world comment was awesome. Every unexpected show of reaction by L makes me smile, also I wonder if he is having Raito on or he really doesn't know what getting off on means.

The L typing on the keyboard like a university who had their these due and after putting it off for the past year, looking like the lovechild of an owl and a spider, and something lightening inside Raito at the lol of surprise on L's face when Raito initiated contact were mu favorite parts of the chapter :)

(He never thought he'd see the day that he'd be begging another male to stop work and come to bed. He shuddered.)
This made me laugh. Wow, L sounding put out about Raito needing to sleep when L wasn't tired made me want to punch L in the face. Well done Raito POV :) Was L telling the truth about having to pry himself out of Raito's wandering clutches xD?

oh
what
it's finished?
no
that was beautiful

ooh yes yes yes yesss bridal style

oh and btw I noticed this a while back but forgot to comment: this is the Yostuba ark, right? idk this is probably me being stupid and missing something out but at this point in Death Note Light wasn't aware he was Kira.? nvm ignore me I'll figure it out soon I'm just dumb xx

:( cockblocked by shady old man-father #relatable