ichigo was mean please make a series where ryou finds out on his own and realises that he did want a mushy love poem

the poems were so cleverly written!

i mean it, it was good!

If only you could continue this story,

your fans will love it a lot,

we would all give you your much deserved glory,

our hearts are going in knots,

so please do write us another story for us to enjoy~

It's bad but it's what everyone wants :D

Very interesting! :3

Please write another chapter. I love it.

I just wish i could write the review in a poem.

You could (if you wanted)turn it into a love story,

or at the end ichigo could appologise and ryou would remember her.

please, please please continue!

Here's what I was looking for in your entry:

1. Proper Spelling/Grammar

2. How well it was put together under four thousand words

3. How IC the characters are even with it being an AU

4. How well you portrayed Ryou and Ichigo's relationship (romantic or friendly)

5. How it's ended

6. The overall development

7. No character bashing

8. Plot

9. Detail

10. If all of my contest rules were taken into consideration and used...

To begin, I will point out some errors I found. First one, was in this sentence: "Might want to watch where you're going in future, baka," he said...- I think you mean "THE future". The second error I found was that you used the wrong word-you used "threw" when it was supposed to be "through". And the last error I found was in one of the poems. You put "You closer" when it should be "you're closer".

Aside from those errors, I found this story to be quite cute. Although I do find it hard for someone to hold a grudge that long, but I think you made it work. And your visionary words are getting better and better. Like I said many times before, when you're my age you're going to be a lot better than me and that makes me a little worried. xD

I did like the little poems too, I thought they were cute as well. But the main thing I think this story lacked was IchigoxRyou interactions-this only contained... one. o.o

Overall pretty good Jess. :P

Much love

~Kittie

I have got to admit, this is actually my favorite entry I've read so far. You did a wonderful job writing this piece, and I truly enjoyed reading it. The poems were well written too. :)

Good luck on the contest!

Oh my goodness! Talk about angsty!

And why is the competition so darn difficult to beat? Well, my fic was fun to write anyway.

Did you seriously write those poems? Good work. I can't write poetry at all, so I always appreciate it when I read good poetry work!

Boy have you definately got a good chance of winning.

SK

It's odd that you went with Romance as a genre for this. I really didn't get a romantic-fiction sense at all from this story.

But let me back up. You use two things (rhyming poetry and school!AU) that almost always turn me off. For me, at least, it was the ABSENCE of romance in this fic that saved it. Think about it: Yeah, Ichigo feels bad afterwords, but she plots a complex, elaborate revenge over something not-that-major that happened to her when she was just a little kid. That's harsh stuff.

And I really, really like it.

*cracks up laughing* This is awesome! I love it! Nice job!

Hmm being a strangely unfeeling person I felt nothing at the end of this, good job writing it though KK, I hope Kish K likes it and many others do )