Rapist not raper

Let me tell you,
I've ONLY read the summary and have no plans to stop by and read it. However I did want to inform you and whoever reads this: it is not ok to romantacize rape. Rape is an act that is not meant to be seem better or ok because if someone did something without your consent you would not like it or fall in love with that person. If you do give consent (which as far as I can tell it wasn't given) then that is ok because you are agreeing to it.

SasuNaru- giving the fangirls (and boys -wiggles eyebrows suggestively-) something to scream about. All that hot smexy manxman smex.

I Love the way this story is writing, Hope you'll uploads the story soon; I want to know what happen next in the story. So please update the story ASAP.

When will you continue this story?

I want to know what will happen next in the story.

I love it. The name of the duo is a little corny, but that's all right.

hmmm... very interesting!

I didn't finish reading it.

The reason:

You mix japanese words in. DON'T! They sound like idiots. They sound stupid. They sound like geeks. Sasuke doesn't give of the "Big bad kidnapper" vibe. Naruto DOES give of a vibe... It's just the wrong one. Naruto gives of a "I'm a weak helpless damsel in distress and I will do anything you say" vibe. That is very OOC.

I believe it would be MUCH better if you change them to english.

I actually translated while I read.

But that -sadly- wasn't enough.

This is what I think. If you don't like it then I'm sorry.

Loved it! O.n

This is a very nice story!

I thought it would be Itachi...

Wow, good stroy but this wasn't rape hahaha oh well, it was good

What you really need to do is post this as PWP.

(If you didn't know, it means porn without plot.)

You explained NOTHING, even if it does center around a crime/rape scene, nothing else expanded on that. But, I did get alot of porn.

So for me to be honest, I am very disappointed because not only did you exploit a very sensitive topic, you did it for porn.

Sasuke should've even been uke, he had no business being a OOC rapist, now what sense does that make?

Also, you're grammar was alittle off in some chapters, you missed a couple words, misused a comma here and there, nothing way bad, but I thought you should be aware.

Please don't take this to heart, but I feel like you took what could've been a very good story, and turned it into meaningless porn, which, was very good, I'll admit, but I also didn't like the way both of them seemed like ukes and neither one was seme enough to go on top, you might want to watch your OOC meter next time.

And as a last thing, if you wish to add Japanese, please understand that most of us reading this in ENGLISH, aren't Japanese, and although most of us are Otakus and will get by, it would be to your (and some other readers) to put some footnotes at the bottom to explain some words, reading between English and Japanese was confusing some to me. However, it is a very particular style of writing and I think that you didn't do a terrible job on it, and trust me, I've read worse. Despite the fact the Japanese was redundant (also showing that you might not have known so many phrases yourself) but I also felt like some of those phrases didn't even really belong in some places, but that is out of my suggestion range.

I want you to take this as advice, if your goal here was to make each and every reader grab a tissue box, I'd give you an A, however, you didn't market it that way. If you were trying to make hot scenes, and romance, and RAPE, then I'd give you an F. The plus comes from the fact that you did an okay job with dialogue. (But you're descriptions could use a little work, too.)

I advise you to find a BETA that specializes in plot-work. You seem to lack there mostly, and please contact me if you are searching for one but have come to no luck, I'd be happy to help if you wish so.

Good Luck!

hi! i really love the pairing sasunaru (though i must admit, itanaru really interests me too), but could you please tell me what "Daijoubu", "nan desuka", and "nandayo" mean?

love it it is so col

Awesome story! The ending wasn't crappy, I actually like it. w What with Naruto being sarcastic that was funny! We! I bought more cookies! . *gives two cookies* That's for writing about my obsession XD (Yes, I am obsessed with SasuNaru .)