a super cool story, as tradition dictates, I read the next part, if this, ... although it seems that, greetings, see you, bye!

Yeah, I can’t read this. The rants are one thing, but everyone reveals way too much information, which is convenient exposition for us. It’s also ironic that while they give excessive information on most things, you completely brush over some other things that may actually need explaining. Like why Naruto got scars when he never had before. Or how Naruto managed to lose Kakashi or not be seen by the ANBU guarding the academy when he was so unsubtle that Shukaku, Inoichi and Chōza not only saw him as he approached the place, but saw how he entered, and why he supposedly wasn’t smart enough to cover up the fact he had been there by leaving windows open. Another annoying, though admittedly minor issue is the jargon. What the hell is ninja CIA? I understand that as an author you get some creative liberties, but there are already lore friendly elements like T&I or ANBU itself, there is no ‘CIA’.

Mental conditioning.. haha. Inoichi couldn’t even teach his own daughter morals, not to mention he lost his cool literally as soon as she did something wrong. I just have two gripes beyond that irony.

The first is the dialogue. They all go on random rants that detail their current psyche which are not only very forced, it’s unrealistic for people to give such lengthy speeches like that on the go, especially without any mid-speech musing or rephrasing. It’s like they’re reading from a pre written speech and it gives off a robotic, monotonous feeling which frankly makes me incapable of feeling sad or moved.

The second is the self harm. I’m going to look down on anyone who self harms, there’s no reasonable explanation for it and anyone who has scars on their wrist claiming to have tried killing themselves is full of it. If they wanted to, they could have and they wouldn’t have stopped trying until they did. He’s a bloody ninja with sharp blades, yet he only cut deep enough to scar? And made the same mistake nine times before giving up? He’s either clinically retarded or an attention seeker who loves the feeling of self pity. Whichever the case, it reflects badly on the story and you as the author who decided to add such a cheap, angsty way to make us feel sorrow for him. The fact he openly showed someone them was just another thing. One of my friends tried, but he couldn’t get the nerve to cut deep enough and realised he didn’t want to die. I only found out by accident and it was extremely embarrassing for him, since such things are EXTREMELY personal. Naruto just casually shows these three strangers who’d he’d never met and who’d never done anything to help him before? Why? Like I said, cheap move, author.

Pro tip from me, who is most definitely not a pro; never use caps lock. If someone shouts, at an exclamation mark and sayinsert character] shouted” or something to that effect. The only time caps lock should be used is when you want to emphasise a word but there is no bold or italic option to do so, the ONLY time. See what I mean? Also, ki? This isn’t Dragon Ball, it’s not ki, it’s chakra.

Excellent story

. . . . . He screams "Shit!" from a paper cut?
"Jounin level pain tolerances" - Kakashi.
That paper lethal as fuck.

o.O Interesting.

I'm really intrigued by the whole "Miko" deal. First few chapters started off rough but this is getting interesting.

I'd like to see a story where Naruto gambles at a young age and that's the one difference - then it butterflies. 'cause he really does have absurd luck at gambling, at least in canon. And he coulda been quite rich even as an orphan hehe.

. . . What Yoshino did is not okay. Ever. In any form.
She should be executed. Now.

Yeah inoichi it's all good until in is pregnant with Naruto's baby

Ino committed a serious mistake here due to her fangirl stage that she abandons it fast.

I cant describe right now how wtf this chapter came off. At first when it was mentioned hes actually 15 I nearly face palmed. The whole sexy jutsu thing and her even trying to have him get the privates right and then tell him to basically become z girl and use that knowledge made me cringe and NOT want to see where this messed up crap goes.

Kid needs his life turned around and for the better and hes being taught to use his body to manipulate men down to having to physically use his body in a very unpleasant way. Wtf

You seem to have fallen into the anime trap where the female is allowed to be a pure bitch bully and not only is she allowed to do it, you appear to applaud it.

I think author's teachers have sabotaged his education as well according to his writing.