Ahhhh I love this! So exciting.

Well, this chapter just killed it for me. It was tough trudging through all these recent chapters where Sarah just gives up on looking for her brother and hands that responsibility over to someone else. This already seemed out of character enough for our protagonist. However, I draw the line at glorifying domestic abuse and labeling it with a "romance" tag. This is really disappointing because this story was really interesting and unique up until the point where Sarah starts doing house work instead of actively rescuing her brother. That strong intro was what kept me committed for as long as I did, but I just can't make sense of these botched characterizations any more.

New to your story and I'm so very glad you are back, dusting them off. Excellent work.. totally worth not sleeping because I couldn't put it down
And I'm one of those odd people who reads profiles. I had to know if your return would be ongoing. Lol. Now I'm off to read all your Labyrinth work to hold me over until you add a chapter to this one.

Wow! I really enjoyed this story and your other labyrinth fics too. Hard to imagine that English is not your first language because apart from some super minor mistakes here and there, you really write soo well! 3 Hope this story is not abandoned and that you will update soon! In the meantime I’ll be waiting patiently... thank you.

Yay!

So Jareth's mother is Ariadne? Who conquered the Labyrinth with a ball of thread. This is a terrific story. But you make the most egregious mistakes in English, simple, dumb ones that your beta does not catch. Is English the native language of both of you?

And she doesn't immediately recognize the name Itys and its association with Tereus and Procne? That's hardly believable.

Jareth is Ariadne's son!? Wow, there's a twist. So is Theseus or Dionysus his dad? This is great!

I love how you're working the story of Ariadne, Dionysus, Phaedra and Theseus into this...

Itys, eh? Could it be that someone wished Hoopoe's son away long ago? Getting very interesting!

Wow, powerful stuff! You should be careful when writing about magic, though, lest you inadvertently write something real. This seems okay, though...even though it seems to have summoned Mercury himself, god of writers...

Great conflict setting up. Well done indeed.

Very nice, and nicely drawn, beginning. I am looking forward to see where you take this.

I was enjoying your story and I am dissappointed there's no conclusion. Do you plan one, because it is a wonderful story not to have one.

I really hope you cotinue this story, i can't wait to see how it turns out.