Allie and Seth?

wow

Awesome, great...now update. Hey, I'm poet and I didn't even know it!

OMG, I lOVE this story! I'm usually a Peah fan, but I've already read it all, so i decided to branch out! I can't wati for the next chapter!

awwwwwww...i like jared and kim...can't wait for the rest of the chapter

Please keep writing

great chapter :)

please hurry up and upload! or tell us a rough time when you will, i actually can not wait until you do, i check my emails everyday to see if you've updated and am a little disappointed that you havn't :( when will you post the next chapter? love the story :D x

UPLOAD!

Hello! PLEASE please please update this story soon! It's really really great!This is one of the best i've ever read! It's really fantastic! Awesome! I love it! Thank you! ) :) D :D

I know it feels discouraging when you think your stories aren't working but you can't dump them. Especially such a good one. It is really good. I hope you update soon. Because reviews are what people think of our work. We can be happy if it's appreciated..but if it's not that just means that they have a problem. Not us. Finish it, please. I'm begging.

please please please continue writing this story - luv it so much :D

;(

I swear, that is one of the most depressing fics I've ever read! I hope he saves her. he can be her own personal Batman (Batman is by far the coolest superhero ever!)

update soon, since you haven't update for a while -glares- I think I just might go insane if you don't.

see you on the flip side,

Rachel 3

Hey this is a great story so far, just have some constructive criticism for you! If you don't like, it, please, just tell me to shut up. First off, you put in way to many comma's. To make it easy, wherever you have to capatalize some that is NOT a specific place, person, or thing - such as I, Washington, or Iams dog food - it should be a new sentence. Example:

So this is where I am right now living in Las Push in an old ass house with my mom, step father, and little sister, This is my story.

This sentence should have been written as followed:

So this is where I am right now; living in La push in this old ass house, with my mom, step father, and my little sister. This is my story.

Another thing: try to separate your writing into paragraphs. If you think that what you're writing is straying off your original subject of the paragraph, start a new one. To make sure these things don't happen again, try using Microsoft Office Word, if you aren't already.

Again, this wasn't in any way meant to be hurtful or offensive, only to be constructive criticism! It's a really good story line, though! Never would have thought of it. Feel free to message me for any questions, or if you'd like to run something by me.

ah :( so sad