Very good fic. I was not sure where it was going to at the beginning, but I finally liked it. Although not a Shampoo fan, it was good to have a change of focus for once. My only complaint is about the end, it's really abrupt and rushed.

Honestly, I hoped they'd tear into Nodoka about how it was her contract that forced Ranma to be as "unmanly" as she claimed, so she should be the one to commit seppuku for sullying her family's honor so terribly. I'd enjoy watching her do it. She is honestly the most disgusting and dishonorable character in my opinion.

A great sory. I'll gonna name it a favorite.

You know, while I like Shampoo more than other fiancees, I think she is the only one who ruins her own luck with Ranma by being pushy, tricky and underhanded (which makes her untrustworthy), and the fact that Cologne's plans always target Ranma's massive ego and pride does not help.

What you skipped that annoys me is the part where ranma acutally uses the umisenken to wreck Ryu...

Finally, somebody who can both write Ranma, and like writing him, and acutally writes him realistically. He has so many issues, it's not even funny, but he does make an awesome main character.

Yeah, this was good. I gotta say, I hate the stories that paint Ranma as this guilded figure, who is just cursed by his terrible parents, Ryouga, and eveyrbody... When he is a violent, arrogant, egotistical maniac, who turns into a cute girl in an instant...

Why would Shampoo talk to her grandmother in Japanese. because, the chinese is Xian Pu, and Ku Lohn. Cool chapter, and yes, Ranma totally digs challenges. Like the reversal jewel incident.

Brilliant. Great history, I really liked how you adapted elements from the OVA's and the manga in your own setting, ending it with a very satisfactory conclusion. You rock!

I really REALLY liked the lack of character bashing. Even good Ranma fanfiction has a little taint of 'serous business' to whats supposed to be slapstic. This is in VERY good taste of canon respect despite it being very different because it's fanfiction.

Your story has been reviewed and can be found under "The Fanfic Critic" thread.

Till next time,

ClanCrusher

Good story. A couple of problems with inconsistant spelling but apart from that well done and interesting

Just wanted to say this was a really great story. You kept the flavour of the series and...bah everything was good! Thanks for the read

Great story! I especially liked the open ending. Very appropriate considering none of the fiancees got the upper hand. It also had in characters, good fight scenes, plot and a good idea that constantly drove it forward.

My one concern is how I found it on ffn. I'm not really a fan of Akane so when I saw her name paired with Shampoo, I figured it was some weird AU pairing, so I avoided it like the plague! Glad I didn't this time as it rocked. if you want this hidden gem to be better discovered, remove her name. Maybe use Ranma instead (even though it's not really a pairing fic). Congrats!

I like the focus on fighting that the fiances gain. You don't really resolve the pairings, but I suppose that whoever you'd pick for Ranma would tick off a lot of your readers.