I'm liking this story so far! Please continue it soon!

By the way, are you going to add elements from Atelier Escha & Logy? I was wondering what would his interaction with Clone would be like.

Happy Writing!

No to the story

Just for the record, I HATE dumb naruto, I think it was a STUPID plot device and it was MORONIC considering EVERYONE in the village has an iq of their SHOE SIZE! Nobody in the village (including the hokage) seems to have two working BRAIN CELLS TO RUB TOGETHER so making naruto the DUMB one seems redundant! (the dumb one of THE LEAF? Can't get out of bed in the morning without causing bodily harm to themselves, which is kinda funny because that's happened to kiba in quite a few flashbacks).. Think about it, the village thinks it's NORMAL when "the professor's" grandson runs around with a scarf longer then HE IS in a football helmet(something we usually find on "special" .. (aka) dim-witted (mentally CHALLENGED) children.. They have a "genius" 4-5 times a generation... (I figure it's someone that can tie their own shoes without help) Because said "geniuses" never seem to be smarter then they were in the years before they finished school. Holding on to grudges that MEAN NOTHING now and that they SHOULD know better, etc... Look at the facts... There is supposedly an ENTIRE cryptography division in the leaf, and yet they have NO CLUE where sound is, no idea who's in the akutskik, where it's base is, what it's motives are (even though it's ONLY motive is collect the tailed beasts), no way of getting this info to others OR finding out who's taken, had no idea a kage had been killed or that two ARMIES had snuck into the leaf(when they SUPPOSEDLY have a barrier), along with a WMD(at least IRL, we do tend to NOTICE when one of those slip in).. ROFL... Had no warning of the zombie attack, or a HORDE of zetsus... Hmm and yet you wonder why I think they are DUMB? Oh and the biggest, there are 6-7 people with a "lost" doujutsu(that ONLY appear to ONE).. that all act like the stepford sisters and it takes half a season to figure out they are puppets?...ROFL... .yeah LOTS OF "geniuses" there.

"creepy teacher" that tells a student "do this and you have to keep it a secret from everyone"... Yeah that's not a genius plan.

Just for the record, I HATE dumb naruto, I think it was a STUPID plot device and it was MORONIC considering EVERYONE in the village has an iq of their SHOE SIZE! Nobody in the village (including the hokage) seems to have two working BRAIN CELLS TO RUB TOGETHER so making naruto the DUMB one seems redundant! (the dumb one of THE LEAF? Can't get out of bed in the morning without causing bodily harm to themselves, which is kinda funny because that's happened to kiba in quite a few flashbacks).. Think about it, the village thinks it's NORMAL when "the professor's" grandson runs around with a scarf longer then HE IS in a football helmet(something we usually find on "special" .. (aka) dim-witted (mentally CHALLENGED) children.. They have a "genius" 4-5 times a generation... (I figure it's someone that can tie their own shoes without help) Because said "geniuses" never seem to be smarter then they were in the years before they finished school. Holding on to grudges that MEAN NOTHING now and that they SHOULD know better, etc... Look at the facts... There is supposedly an ENTIRE cryptography division in the leaf, and yet they have NO CLUE where sound is, no idea who's in the akutskik, where it's base is, what it's motives are (even though it's ONLY motive is collect the tailed beasts), no way of getting this info to others OR finding out who's taken, had no idea a kage had been killed or that two ARMIES had snuck into the leaf(when they SUPPOSEDLY have a barrier), along with a WMD(at least IRL, we do tend to NOTICE when one of those slip in).. ROFL... Had no warning of the zombie attack, or a HORDE of zetsus... Hmm and yet you wonder why I think they are DUMB? Oh and the biggest, there are 6-7 people with a "lost" doujutsu(that ONLY appear to ONE).. that all act like the stepford sisters and it takes half a season to figure out they are puppets?...ROFL... .yeah LOTS OF "geniuses" there.

Your storyYour story is marvellous and has a freshness with a perspective that is unique.

P.s. I would like too use a concept in your story the fate cards alchemical weapon in a fic that I am writing please let me know whether I can use them or not Ill give you one month to respond before I will consider that you have moved on from the site and utilize the idea.

That fight was like a boss fight in a video game

please

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Yeah, I'm more familiar, even, with real life historical alchemy, than this. (Without so many people trying to make a philosopher's stone, by doing strange experiments with metallurgy, who knows what information we might lack. I also heard that alchemists were the ones to invent and develop most of the glassware tools that chemists use. I'm glad that stuff was invented so early; chemistry is pretty vital to a lot of modern technology and medicine.) But yeah, I read and watched Full Metal Alchemist, and have little clue what Atelier Iris is.

Great story I really liked it a shame that it looks like you gave up on it the story was getting very good.

This story is so slow paced that I want to kill the writer how can you make him so weak when he's and alchemists it infuriating and these stupid cards he got is annoyingly stupid couldn't five him a beter weapon

So i'm confused is Saki just using naruto or does she actully care for him?

THIS FIC IS FUCKIG AWESOME!

Now onto a proper review, the fic is good I wanted to read it all in one go but alas time does not still for me so I read it in over a couple of days.

The alchemy idea is very well done, even done properly too I'm guessing you have researched alchemy allot or atleast read some interesting books.

Have you read a series involving Nicholas flamel and perenell?

Anyway I am horrible at grammar but your spelling errors were nil or atleast what I found. The plot is really cool and everything's interesting.

Please tell me sasuke gets together with Naruto or atleast make Naruto aware she's using him. I know you said the gwen noticed but she didn't mention anything? Could the two mana's 3? Beat him into giving up Sakura? Like get completely fed up with it.

Sasuke defection should be interesting but it's going to suck if she kills or injures on of the mana's... I don't know I'm just rambling now really. Your story has me daydreaming about the possibilities and I can't wait for more,

I may use some of the stuff from your story in a fic I'm writing, haven't posted it yet I want to get to 100,000 words first but nothin like stealing your whole alchemy idea, just how some of the characters act, like the kyuubi jokes about the Nile and stuff PRICELESS!

This is truly very interesting to read; please update soon

Dangit, finished this whole thing in one day and now there's no more. That sucks, but I guess it can't be helped.

It was good while it lasted.