I like this story so far. This is my first time reading it and I think it's very good. Keep up the good work!

Interesting story so far. Can't wait to read chapter three!

I liked this first chapter. This is my first time reading this story and I think it's good so far. Keep up the good work!

WooO I live in Australia too and I think I have heard about camp Kanga from one of my friends but I might be mistaken.

OMG! this is awsome! LOVE IT!

omg u ar so good. pls update. i cant wait

Hey Chez,

This is a awesome story and every1 that reads it knows it!

Keep writing keep smiling and keep partying!

luv ya

XOXO

Emi

o0o0, interesting chapter here, I do wonder what happened at the camp and how it effected Paul, as I said very interesting and it was a nice change to hear from the wolves for a little while, even if they are a little easily annoyed lol. Liked this a lot, there were no mistakes that I could see and I'm looking forward to more. Good work :) x

hey this is good:) i have an idea for something they could do: well they could play a game of footy or something but mix up the cullens and wolves so they have to work together to win! i think it would definitely have plenty of arguing and it would be really funny to see what they have to do:) anyway just an idea u dont need to do it! great stuff keep up the awesome work:D

fairyfloss xoxo

hi, i have enjoyed reading your story a bit confused as to why the jacob got all in your face with the vamp girls, i thought they were all friends or close anyway. but they already know that the vamps are veg's so whats the big threat about.

never been to camp but how bout a pov in mike or jessica/lauren etc view trying to impress bella/edward in archery maybe shooting to endanger someones life and the vamps/wolfs having to save each others butts

I liked the chapter on the food fight, particularly the way you described Edward's "carefree and playful" moment. Are the others from their school here, like Mike, Jessica, Lauren, Tyler, Ben, and Angela? It might be fun to have them play pranks on the human classmates, or have the human classmates try unsuccessfully to prank them (vampire powers would tip them off). I've never been to camp myself (I know, I was a deprived child ;)) but I remember my cousin telling me about a prank where they strapped someone who was asleep to their bed using toilet paper and then woke them up pretending there was a fire.

OMG fab story! I would give you examples but where i live in england u don't go to camp soz. But i did have an idea. OK, Bella is still angry at Edward for the food thing so when mike comes and asks to be bella partner for a moonlight walk something that is supposd to be romantic Bella agrees to get back at edward. YOu could also use Jacob! Just an idea lol

love writing.

my story from camp:

i was eating lunch with my friends when this one guy came up to my friend and said:

"you are as hot as these mashed potatoes" in a "trying to be sexy" way.

we all burst out laghing and my friends boyfriend got up and said in a funny gay voice:

"then go kiss your mashed potatos couse your not getting any of her!"

and then he snapped his hand in a z formashion.

hahahahahahaha

plese includ this story

addicted2twilight

really cool story.

i go camping all the time and some of the stuff we do is:

abseiling, rock climbing, bivawacking (sleep under a makeshift shelter or tarpoline), hiking/tramping, river crossing, tree climbing/jumping with a harness on, archery, orienteering, air rifles, dance performances, skits (mini plays done in groups if you want some examples just ask me) you might find other things people do on camps on the girl guiding and scouts websites.

Hey Chez,

Good idea for the kiaking. I got a idea for your awesome story. Well last year for my year 7 camp I went to this camp site called Catarac park and there was this activity called the big swing. What it is is there is two poles like poower line poles and 30 metres high and one person puts a harness on wich is then cliped onto 2 ropes one for everyone to pull you up and the other is connected to the poles. then they pull you up till you say stop then there is a small orange rope you pull and when you pull it you fall and you swing on the rope and it goes so high its so fun and it gets your heart rate going!

Please hurry and write the next chapter!

KEEP WRITING. KEEP SMILING AND KEEP PARTYING!

FROM EMI

XOXO;)