Yeah, old story is old; I'm reviewing as part of an effort to review every horror story in this category. Seriously.

I think this story has too many OCs. I don't mean that in a "Grr, OCs are bad, they're all Mary-Sues, rabble rabble" way; I'm generally pretty OC-positive. But you introduce so many new characters so fast that you don't really give any of them enough attention as characters, and then they are both confusing (because I don't remember who's who) and boring (because I don't care about any of them) to read about.

Maybe that's why, on the whole, this story didn't do much for me. It felt at once rushed and like nothing was really happening. Also, I don't think it was in any way horror - though that's not necessarily a criticism, except in that I think it should have been stuck in a different genre. I'm not saying that your story (or your OCs, for that matter) are BAD; they just strike me as very average.

LIE! It...It's not possible! Poor Pai! Poor Taruto! Poor Kisshu! LIE! LIE! LIE!

Kisshu:It's okay Angel It's just a story.

Minna:(looks at Kisshu shocked)

Kisshu:Nani?

Pai:That was very out of character.

Angel:L-Lie, It was very sweet. Thank you Kisshu.

Minna:(even more shocked bye Angel)

Angel:NANI?

Taruto:Aren't you the one who tortures him on a regular basis?

Angel:I do have a heart buried deep down inside me somewhere.

Kioto:(mutters) Very deep.

Angel:Damare Baka!

NANI? So Ichigo,Lettuce, and Pudding are injured? LIE!

Kisshu:Oh great she's gonna have one of her psychotic fangirl episodes!

Angel:Lie I only have those when something bad happens to you.

Minna:GAH!

GAH more freaks I can't take it! And they're traitors!

Everyone:You have the ears and fangs too!

Angel:And your point is...?

Kisshu:(mutters)Baka.

Angel:Why does life hate me?

Well that was a pretty stupid move. Transforming in front of the whole school.

Pai:Seems like something you would do, Angel.

Angel:Ya know what, Pai, You talk to much.

Everyone:(sweatdrops)

Kisshu:Angel, you know this is Pai your talking about, Right?

Angel:Oh we were talking about Pai? I thought we were talking about Kioto(ha Kioto'sGirl22)

Everyone:(smacks fore-head)

Well then... I am thouroghly confuzzled. (word that is a mix between confused and puzzled). But I seriously like this!

Teehee ooh they're busted!

Taruto:Thank you for pointing out the obvious... again.

Angel:Shaut up oldie!

Taruto:Oi don't call me old you freak!

Angel:Just cause I am part alien freak(like you), part human, and part red panda does not make me a freak!

Taruto:Actually it kinda does.

(snicker)...(giggle)...(bursts out laughing) Your married, Your a father, and your old!(says to all three aliens)

Aliens:DAMARE!

Angel:Hahahahaha! I can not imagine Kisshu or Taruto with kids...nope still nothing. Pai on the other hand...

Anywho love the idea all though there are a lot of kids and names which really confuses me.

Kisshu:Your ALWAYS confused.

Angel:I know right?

I feel like I'm reading a parody... o_o Still, it's not a crap ending. I've seen worse and this isn't one of them, Jazz-chan... you better do an aftermath to make up for it! Or Pai is engaged to Zakuro. *nods*

Short ending, but still, I liked it.

Easy wins are some of the best kinds D Except when the enemy is really weak.

Kuji is a chicken! *sticks tongue out*

"Nyuu~!

I likey the Bloopers xD

-MJ"

Oohh, more cliffhangers. Man, i hate those! But I'll deal for now. Update soon, Jazz-san!

LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL!

funny bloopers and an awesome chapter.

I am going to say this now.

Taruto is like... a bad father! Does he not even care where I go?

And...Kuji is already a bastard. poor birdy (

Who screamed? I must know this!

And I have a question...

If some of the mews had an alien as a father... they should have some alien powers two...right?

And the bloopers were funny!

Fredrick... wow that would make him sound like a weakling...

Pregnant Keiichiro and a leader named Fredrick... hilarious. xD