PLEASE WRITE MORE

I really hope you're updating this and/or If You Wanted Honesty. I love your ideas. They're brilliant. xo

Has Harry not been practicing his gift? I know his Aunt told him not to but he could do it without her knowledge.

this is interesting so far

interesting ideal, I like your ideal and story, hope to see more!

Great little story

Oh, yes, that release of the snake was nicely done. It should be rather interesting to see how *this* Harry Potter gets sorted.

it strange reading about the dursleys being semi nice but great chapter keep it up

I think this is a good idea dont let the people with bad taste keep you down. great story keep it up

This story has a very interesting idea at its base, there are only two major problems with this story so far, those being the chapters are too short and it is written very dryly. Luckily there is one thing you can do which would potentially fix both problems. That solution is to be far more descriptive. Describe things more clearly, help immerse your readers into the world. Tell us more of what is going on and help us see things as you want us to see them in your world. If you do this, it will help lengthen the chapters and they would not be as dry and bland. I'll continue reading, but I hope you take my advice and improve the story.

Look your stuff IS good but it also is too short and on the dry side

This sounds amazing! I'll be watching for new chapters. I especially liked Sirius in the first chapter.

And your explanation of why Petunia and Vernon kept Harry is much better than the book's, in my opinion. Yeah, I love the HP books and all, but if Petunia really hated Lily that much, she would have definitely taken Harry to an orphanage. Props.

Very interested to see how this all works. You've got the basics down already: Dumbledore is a dumb-ass - nothing more, nothing less.

Sirius deleviring Harry to Dumbledore? I wonder if he's going to askaban just the same?

Anyway, good job, looks interesting.

Well, you've got an interesting premise and a good opening. I'll be interested in seeing where you take this one.