A bit of constructive criticism:

The story is inmteresting, and I get that you're trying to set up Lucinda's big seacret to be revealed, but I don't think it works very well when we see her in her home life, and read her thoughts. You cut them off before they get to a conclusion because you don't want the readers to know what she's hiding. This works well when she's speaking to someone, but when we see it in her own head it's unnatural, cause that's just not how thoughts end.

Also, I don't know who's chapter it is until their name is said which is a bit confusing, but that's not too big of a deal.

The bitchy character is cliche - which is fine if you want her to be specifically - but I would suggest using the cliched personality as a starting point to work on. Have her be something else other than the bitch or the slut or wahtever. Layer her with personality that you see in people in everyday life. This is hard as a writer, I get that. But you can use your own personality as a template. I know I'm not a great person 100% of the time, and so when I am being a bitch I think of why I've been luike that. Yoou don't have to spell it out for readers, but having a character's motivation in the back of your mind leads you to write things that make them more 3D.

I appreciate the story is well under way, so maybe you can use this feedback as you go along, or if you write another story. Keep going though, because that's how we all grow.

I love your writing. I know it has been forever since you posted a new chapter. I hope one day you will get the creative juices to finish this touching piece. Thank you for sharing.

Please update soon!

I love you story!

Please for an devoted reader! *puppy dog eyes*

i found your story a few days ago and i have to confess that i am addicted to it.

it so dramatic, sad, sweet and all.

i really like your writing style and i hope you are going to continue soon.

This is a great story! One of the best! can't wait for more.

love you...

wow, this and the last chapter were so sad and upsetting...I feel so bad for Lucy and everything she has to go through

and then Jasper feeling so lost and not knowing how to help her...I know how that feels and it sucks and hurts

It's so terrible in what's happening, but it's so good too

I really want to know what happened...and I hope Lucy feels better

And I also hope that Jasper and Lucy wind up together...they both need something good in their lives and to be happy

And I'm sorry it's been forever since I've reviewed...I've been bad

I can't wait to see what happens next...but I must admit, I'm also scared

Another linkin park song.

Good song. (NUMB)

MY throat is sore.

GOOd CHAPTER (:

good chapter.

Love it.

Sorry my reviews suck.

So far I like it.

I wasn't sure I liked this Jasper, but I do. This story is so interesting I cannot leave it alone.

I want to read it fast to see what happens, but I am trying very hard to just enjoy it.

Wonderful.