this is pretty interesting so far and I cant wait to see where it goes but I would in the future like to see naruto interact more with the children. you started out good with inari but after they got back to the leaf we havent seen him just heard a few mentions of him.

err... 0100 hrs is 1am. I think you were looking for 1300hr

uh maybe a stupid and random thing to focus on but... Really? she wants him to get rid of his black clothing because...? after he brought up that it helps keep him alive she should have left it maybe even demand he keep it instead.

J'aime beaucoup

Est-ce que Gaara est en vie?
Car shukaku est mort mais son hôte?

J'aurai dis Anko qui regarde mais Hinata c'est bien car cela reste canon.

Il faudrait que les finances du clan Nara dégringole .

Qui est Ania ?
Un oc mais du côté huyga ou inuzuka.

J'aime bien un citron des le début chouette même si j'aurais préféré voir Hinata en premier.

You know your story sucks the minute my 2 guys likes it

I really want to see what happens next. Looking forward to the next chapter. Keep up the great work!

Tbh it seems your really pushing the whole " women are great" thing and a bit is comedic but this is a bit much...

that was good keep the chapters coming

Great story I really liked it a shame that it looks like you gave up on it.

next

I do hope you finish this a good story