I really liked your beginning... I even liked most of what came afterward. You are definitely a good writer. Still, I bet your stories would become even better if at one point you slowed down a little bit more. I probably can't explain it very well, but I was always waiting for the point where you'd let us get to know the characters a bit better. Where we could start to emphatize with them. Or at least know their struggle. I don't feel like I know any of the characters well, by the end of this, not even Harry. I don't even know him well enough to decide whether I like him or not. I also don't see the motivation behind their fight. Probably it's intended this way, that we don't really know what the Order is fighting for, what the point of all this was, but for me it's just too long to be this confused. It would probably work as a really long prologue, but I wouldn't continue reading this if the potential sequels were just like this. Still, you have a really engaging style of writing and I finished your story, so that says something! I liked it. Thanks for sharing :)

You've got this oddly Hemingway feel to your writing. Read Valbone earlier this year and then was recommended this, finished, went to look for book II of Skitterleap and it connected that you were the same author. I hope you continue to write whatever project you see fit, I'll be following.

For what it's worth, I'd like to see more of this. Given that you just finished another fic, seems like you might be coming back to this one? Thanks for writing.

one of the most terrifying and riveting works of fic I have ever read. Congratulations. Your skill has few equals! Thank you!

Absolutely stunning.

Hello. This was a very unique plotline, something I have never come across. And you carried it out splendidly. While I applaud your efforts on the story, may I point out something? Please develop your characters a little bit more. Give them a bit of a background. The story was a little abrupt and too fast for a book. In short, the pace and length do not match the storyline. For example, as Harry is your protagonist, develop him a bit more, make the readers connect with him. Build the pace up gradually. But a brilliant effort overall. Looking forward to book 2.

Hey this might be out of line but I have an honest question.

Is there a particular reason this story is still up on fanfiction? If you just changed some names around you could easily publish this as your own original fiction.

If 50 shades could get away with it you certainly could. I say do it. Edit this into your own novel, delete all of the chapters and replace the story with an announcement that you published it as a novel.

A wonderful opening scene. Good choice!

I very distinct AU, with a very unique fighting style for a Harry Potter story. I enjoyed it but was disappointed to see the series wasn’t finished. Hope too see book 2 sometime in the future.

this was very good, will there be more?

Very interesting story. This soldierHarry and the various AUcharacters were a joy to read. Some of the aspects of how magic works and the relative strenght and skill of wizards was kind of bewildering, but all in all a great story. I definitely hope there will be a Book II.

This was awesome and fantastically original work. I'd love to see you continue with the series.

Sorry to hear that you didn't enjoy writing this, but I think it's awesome. Outstanding, even. I love it.

will this ever be continued a sequel perhaps?

Beautiful