'Brittan' If you are deliberate like you might be mocking the Hogwarts stupid sociopath headmaster...yay, go you: If not deliberate, You may want to look at some Geography Sites and keep the information that confuses you but you are referencing in your story on post-it notes or something near your computer.

Your actual insults may lose some punch if there are so many grammar errors reader can't precisely tell what you intend to be pointed. Harry Potter was a little baby left on the Dursley-stoop. Raccoons could have carried him off. Dumbledore deserves a very strategic full-powered barrage of insults.

It’s good but so far it just seems like the only reason Viktor wants Harry is for his bed and not for him at all. I’m not sure if that made sence

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I really like it

Gooood

Its wrap not rape when you put your arm around someone.
You wrap it around them

I really like this story. Please write more soon.

I ONLY READ THE FIRST PARAGRAPH AND I'M ALREADY EXCITED!

please learn how to spell wrap. you keeping typing rape.

omd loved it

I know it's totally different but the thousand years part made me think of Christina Perri's 'Thousand Years' and it became totally HILARIOUS! Still such a lovely story thank you

i am so confused

Btw you’ve been writing rope as rape you might want to correct that

I am really enjoying your story, and your characters
you have a few spelling mistakes and misuse of words that distract from your otherwise engaging story
I do not mean this to be mean, I just wanted to say so because I truly do enjoy your story, and I want to help you turn it into the Masterpiece it has the potential to be
if I could, I would suggest you get a beta, they are most useful

I'm sorry but I can't read this anymore. There is not enough substance in this fic. Krum only wants Harry because he is a carrier - obviously, because there is no mention of how he feels for Harry and the fact that he doesn't know anything else about him.

You've already passed by the Dumbledore and Harry clash as if it is water when we all know it should have been bigger.

You sort of treat your readers as if they are stupid. You give extra descriptions where they are not needed as if we didn't catch it the first three times. You answer questions we did not ask and you continue write without expansion on movements, actions, thoughts, consequences, and interactions. It is all so quick and rushed.

I'm not saying the the whole fic will be like this or have these issues, but it is prevalent enough in three chapters that I cannot continue forward.

I feel that this could be something great. But right now, I can't even enjoy it.