Reviews for The Ultimate Hero |
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Aspen Starlight chapter 5 . 11/19/2009 Interesting story. I hope you still plan to update this story! |
Brawling-Duelist chapter 5 . 10/19/2009 Okay now I'm interested. Although, try to make it longer, mkay? |
Brawling-Duelist chapter 4 . 10/19/2009 Okay so you added a it's actually starting to get interesting. Also, maybe you should try increasing your vocabulary? |
Brawling-Duelist chapter 3 . 10/19/2009 Okay so you added a resolution, but now you need a climax. |
Brawling-Duelist chapter 2 . 10/19/2009 This is lacking any conflict. You need to add a conflict. |
Brawling-Duelist chapter 1 . 10/19/2009 You know that was very short, try to make it longer. |
Fan chapter 5 . 10/4/2009 You have waited to long to update! i am dying over here waiting |
Aaron Leach chapter 5 . 10/2/2009 Awesome story. |
ira chapter 1 . 9/28/2009 awesome |
The Liar Of Truth chapter 5 . 8/31/2009 Yeah, kick butt time! |
SadieYuki chapter 5 . 8/31/2009 I think someone else noted this as well, but try to avoid using symbols in place of words, for instance: "&" instead of "and." I'm looking forward to seeing how the Omega Defiance uses Charlie's family. |
SadieYuki chapter 4 . 8/28/2009 Good chapter, but a small detail: it's Dark Tamara, not Tamera. Again though, very small, so no big deal _. I'm looking forward to seeing if the other students get involved somehow. I'll be looking for the next part! |
The Liar Of Truth chapter 4 . 8/18/2009 Great, more action, but you might want to check out how you arrange your sentence structure. There were some parts where I had to re-read just to understand, but great update. |
Ashley chapter 3 . 8/17/2009 It's okay, ecept the text talk is getting super annoying. Like putting and/or in a sentence? And instead of actually typing AND ur using text talk or internet slanng or whatever it's called and typing &. Just letting ya know, that's not actually a WORD. : Sorry to say, but i'ts justt getting really anoying. Olus i'ts lacking detail. All youre doing in writing he said he responded he angrily said, ubt nothing in why ur chapters are so short. If you detailed them, and actually TOLD us what happened instead of just talking about everthing, it would be SO much bettre and get many more reviews. this story has potential, utb the whole text talk thing isn't exxactly making it better. you will get a lot more reviews if you cut the & instead of and, the other internet salng and add detail. |
The Liar Of Truth chapter 3 . 8/17/2009 Need...more...chapter... *Tragically dies from lack of chapters* Hum, really short. But no matter, hope you update soon. |