Hmm, not bad, not bad at all. I really like the humour, I hope to see more of it. As for the entire story, it's a bit confusing now... but I guess it's supposed to be. Waiting for more!

Not terrible or horrible. Not too bad. Hooray. Maybe good instead.

Heh... actually got me to laugh. And for some strange reason, that's very rare with stories. So... thumbs up!

Completely random, here. Tomo's "precognition", too.

Well... since I am no good with critique... Lookin' forward!

-Keshi-sama