i swear to gosh u better complete this story!

it was very good please continue this! I subscribed to this story so i better get some emails! haha its fun to sound menacing! haha but let me stick to the point! FINISH THIS STORY! :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :)

update plz] lol

nice story so far! What happens next?

this sounds really good so please continue

A paparazzi or a reporter

I think the person should be Tawni! By the way love the story :)

Loved it your right it is a cliffhanger! i would either want it to be jeff, or nico, or grady, or both! Loved it!

Hehe, awesome story and love the new chappie!

&. Nice and Grady. :D

So far so good.

I'm liking Channy rooming together.

Though, this is just a tip, instead of writing the dialogue like this:

-Chad, you're annoying.-

Write it like:

"Chad, you're annoying."

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I'm barely a paragraph into the first chapter but I feel the need to say this: please, please, please change the dialogue indications with "..." or '...' The dashes are making it quite difficult to read, only because their usage is inconsistent. Sometimes it's for a phrase like "what-was-that-look", and sometimes it's actually for speaking. Then occasionally when it's for speaking there are gaps after a dash, then sometimes there aren't...Dashes are also often used to indicate when a word is cut off, which then led to a bit of confusion when I read: "-I know. It’s just that Son-he started as he caught himself before admitting something he shouldn’t." Admittedly, one could work it out pretty quickly (and I know my whinging is a bit exaggerated), but it's much easier and much more enjoyable to read a story when the flow of the narrative is accompanied by the flow of interpretation of what you're looking at. The style of formatting also gives off a better atmosphere to the writing before you even start reading it. Because when I read your story, I see that it has virtually flawless grammar, which is so impressive, but it does look stilted and slightly choppy on the page. Just like the heading and description of a story, its appearance to the reader is really pivotal on how it is going to be read.

In terms of the actual material in the story, I think it's a great premise and I'm gonna keep reading to find out how it goes. Characterisation so far isn't an issue because you have Chad interacting with a group which hasn't really been explored much on the show and so you can mould it in whatever way you seem suitable. Harder part is obviously getting interactions between Sonny and Chad right. I don't know how often Chad gets called "Cooper" by Sonny - the spitting "Chad" is more memorable (maybe work it in if possible). I like Chad teasing Sonny, very believable - though one thing that a lot of stories do which I don't love is when Chad's feelings are to open. Yes, he does like her, and yes it is obvious, but there is always the sense that he's not overly desirous of a relationship and likes her almost against his better judgement (magnetically, if you will). He does try to make her like him, which again doesn't seem too geared towards necessarily starting a relationship, but because he cares about her kind of uncontrollably ("Stupid cute") There's also the factor of wanting to make her like him as an ego-boost; he IS Chad Dylan Cooper. That's why I like the egotistical statement you have in Chapter 1 about 'why wouldn't anyone fall in love with Chad Dylan Cooper?' I don't actually think you've fallen into such a trap in this story, and I certainly don't want you to go shift the tone entirely in the middle of a new chapter, but perhaps just something to keep in mind when you're writing or re-editing the story (or for later things you might like to write).

Nit picky review? Absolutely - but I usually only review the stories which are already very good and have the potential to be even better...I'm looking really forward to looking at the rest of the story.

i think it shud be tawni or portlyn ! by the way i luv ur story its really gud !

luvz karen !...x

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i think it was pretty good. yah the characters r a little OOC but not much. its a good story. keep updating!

i really like this story!

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This is really good! I wish you would update though. But anyways, I love it. 5 stars! * LOL

oh :D

loves this.

loves chad.

not too keen on this skyler.

bo him.

but yeah. i love this :)

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