It's not that bad

this isnt bad. genius

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can you a a sequel story would much appreciate it thank you and make it long this time

This story is highly humorous , i really enjoyed it.

Boy shizune dodge that bullet lol

This wasn't bad, I thought it was really funny. "Job app, marriage proposal, death threat."
"Pocky, tomato, sake" "youthful speed" all made me laugh

Bad fan fiction? No, the Sasuke tomato affinity was hilarious. Was that in the manga that?

but a short story on the pairing is not bad especially with humor.

That was awesomely funny! I freaking love this pairing too! Just wish it got more attention. I guess some might have problems with the age difference, but then again my mom is 10 years older than my dad so as long as Naruto's 18 by the time they got married I don't see the big deal myself. After all, 10 years isn't that much of an age difference when you think about it. Provided one of them is legal age of course.

Wow that was a fantastic read! I'm not even exaggerating when I say this, but this is up there for one of the best NaruShiz fanfics and easily the best NaruShiz oneshot I have read so far. Loved how you told the story from Shizune's POV, the humor was fantastic, and I really liked how the ending gives readers alot of closure!

I'll start off by saying that you should check for spelling errors and (,) errors before posting. Naruto and Shizune is a bit unrealistic, but i couldn't care less about that, because the story was really good and exciting. Even a friend of mine who hates unrealistic fanfictions loved it. I give it 5/6

The only thing I didn't absolutely love about this was the actual confession scene. Everything else was perfect.

i absolutley loooved it . i reckon there should be more naru/shzu pairing fanfics.

Bad fan-fiction?

NONSENSE.

This is one of the funniest fanfics I have ever read. The jokes are well-thought of and executed almost perfectly. Grammar can be bad at some points, but completely forgivable!

This is a masterpiece.

And now I know the true story of how Sasuke Uchiha attained the Mangekyo Sharingan... along with what Akatsuki does in their spare time.

I would recommend practicing your math skills as well, on October 8th you wrote that Shizune had 6 more days until Naruto's birthday on October 10th. First you wrote that his next birthday was his 16th, when Hinata is lurking she muses to herself that it's his 18th birthday.
This was a little rough, but it shows you were coming up with material and getting some practice writing.
I wouldn't mind reading a more polished story in the future.

Cheers!