To be honest, I like how Bulma figured out Mirai Trunks is her son. But why would she hug Gohan like he's her kid...? Shouldn't that be Chi Chi's job?

Great chapter! I hope you plan on updating soon, it's great!

Hey! I hope you are doing well this holiday season? I hope you can get a new chapter up in time for the holiday? If not I hope it will be up soon! Have a great winter break!

Great job! I love how in-character all of them are! I don't think it was too difficult to tell which Gohan was speaking, you made it pretty clear most of the time. I can't wait till the fighting starts too, I am really anticipating it!

Aww man! It has been forver since you last updated this! I hope nothing has happened to you, or you have given up on this! That would be horrible! I hope your still out there, and are planning to come back soon!? I am addicted to this and can't stop re-reading it over again! Please come back soon!

Amazing job! I loved all the emotion and excitment of this chapter! I bet you'd be a great romance novelist, your charater interactions are full of emotion, it's like watching a good movie! It is amazing how well you can change the tone to- one moment the reader is caught up in Bulma's sad emotions, and the next you are feeling panic from Gohan, it is so great! I hope you continue soon, I want to see how the other's, especially Goku's, reaction to finding out who he truly is! Great job with tis chapter and I hope the next one is out real soon!

LOVE IT!
PLEASE UPDATE ASAP!

Awesome chapter! I hope the next chapter to this is out soon!

Love the story, can't what to read more! XD

Not bad. I really loved the lightheartedness of this chapter. The only thing was that I was greatly confused by which Gohan was speaking when. Other than that, nicely done. Please update soon!
-D101

Great update! And to answer your question, primus is the like a god to cybertronians-the transformers. Im a big fan and I often find that I accidentally use some of their words in conversations, it's funny to see the look on people's faces when I say them.

Dang! No wonder she would refuse to share a bathroom with them! Great chapter!
-mks
,out :)

i luv this story so far, i love the fact that future gohan went to the past as well. it sucked that they only used him in one dbz movie with him being such a great character

Hey, this is FloatingCow, don't know how to change the guest name anymore. Great chapter! I was almost crying with Bulma at the beggining! It was so great, I love the amount of emotion you put into this story! I feel embarresed for everything Bulma and Krillin put Gohan through when asking about the future lol. Great job again and I hope to see the next chapter soon!

This has a lot of potential, you just need to work on the kinks and you'll basically have a good story coming along.
See, the thing is, you need to involve a little more emotion and emotive reaction's. Think about it, for example:

"If Goku was still alive than we probably wouldn't be in the situation we are in right now. Back then we didn't have a cure for the heart virus that killed him." she pulled out a small vial full of purple liquid out of her breast pocket. "But we do now." She put the vial in his hands, her own enclosing his. "If we can get this to Goku he can use it when he gets sick and can defeat the androids."

"Oh I get it now! Gohan can go back and give his dad the medicine."

It seems a little weird that Trunks has suck a nonchalant reaction to the fact that they can save the past with the time machine. I mean, this is BIG, not just "Oh hey we get to save Goku now, great." Do you see what I mean?

You'll also need to include much more of the character's thoughts as well. otherwise your just flying through the talking and action with out people's thoughts and reactions to events.

If you take my advice I'm sure you'll do well. I've written but not published a few stories myself. Although because there is so much to think about and write, it takes quite a while for me.

Good luck writing :D
-Leo