its a good story, you should carry it on.

Good beginning !

Please hurry up with next chapter.

Love the chapter! Nice plot idea and seeing how its unfolding. One thing, make sure your time word-usage is consistent. The Yondaime WAS the greatest Hokage, and so on. Otherwise, good job and can hardly wait for the next chapter.

love the story cant wait to see what happens

Good story so far, I'm looking forward to reading more.

I like the story so far, especially introducing jiraiya early to a younger naruto. The only problem is that perhaps their relationship is developinp a little fast, maybe thats just me.

brilliant. Really good first fanfic, i loved it :)

Keep updating. _

awsome

good story

how old is naruto, if he's yonger then his speaking is to mature, (even 4-5, bc he's not in the academy yet) hell for a small child your making him sound like 13-15

your interactons between chacters moves to fast, almost like it's rushed, except between mizuki/ami & ami/naruto (can almost imagine them saying thoes thigs to each other)

good chapter length

not meny mistakes that i could see

not saying everything has to go by cannon (ages, attitude, other nosence), but should still make it bealvable

well that's it, can't think of anything else that poped out at me while reading

update soon, and remember everything up above is my opinion on what needs to be fixed

update soon