Super Cute :D

Roy can do alchemy without the circle

I like! It's sweet, and I could honestly see this happening. Well done! _

cute! Love It

KAWAIi!

That was really cute!

Dear Tsuki,

Thanks so much for sharing your writing and congratulations on your first Royai fanfic! I think this fic is a really, really cute idea and it's pretty well done! I would offer a bit of constructive criticism, though. Watch your words choice: there's several places here where words have become confused (for example, the difference between "to" and "too"). Also, watch comma placement and tenses! Both of these things are really common erros (especially tenses... they're still a pain in the rear for me, too ) I really love the way you describe the rain and the cold- very vivid! Overall, a really cute story. Thanks again for sharing it!

Love in Christ,

Lyny Angell

It was a nice story! I thought it was kind of too fast, though. Maybe Roy wouldn't ask her to marry him right away, or maybe that's how it was at that time... Hard to say. I liked how he transmuted the ring from his watch chain. Anyway, I really liked your story. Maybe we'll see some more? Keep on writing!

I loved it! It was so sweet haha!

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hmm. Very "romantic," but it all seems a bit forced. Perhaps it's because the way you start out the story, "It was a cold and bleak day in Central," sets the tone for a slightly angsty fic (a common ocurence around here) but it changes it's mind halfway through and decides to be a fluffy one.

I loved it! so sweet!

I love this! It was absolutely awesome. Nicely done :)

I loved this! It was so sweet and romantic.

Well, obviously I would like this. It was edited by yours truly after all. :P

Well done!

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I loved this! It was awesome! I like the whole setting with the rain. For once I don't think Roy was usless in the rain. lol

RSx