I have to agree with you, this was one is stronger than The Hunted. And a lot different, but i can see the connection...

the way Naruto and Sasuke meet being very tense, Naruto being naive as from wolf raised, some objectional characters from some powerful wolf or vampire Heirachy. The Hunted had a much simpler plot, this one had a more intergrated plot, history behind people, deeper ideas behind it. it would seem this had

a lot more thinking and work behind it to put it all together so well.

Spelling mistakes here too, some would get past spellcheck, some could of been picked up. (heh, I might be coming across as spelling obsessed,

i just... am picking up on my own weakness in others really)

Having said that, i liked the story. I also liked the dialogue, it's nicely succinct. But i think it's a bit mechanical - just needs some oiling. The rest is well described but it could be more creative, particularly on visuals. just a bit more detail here and there. And character development, i can understand why they're doing what, it has just enough, but there's not much of a connection, they could just use more depth.

And some events don't strike enough impact. Like, i think it's quite nice to cut kyuubi's rebellion and get to the union. Typically you could

guess yeah, Kyuubi's already dealt with, the rest may be touched up somewhere later. But for the weight of it. It did hurt others, besides Naruto. It seems slightly insensitive how easily it skipped to them. Yet, also quite nice.

Anyway, this a great story. Very much enjoyed.

i love it

aww that was 2 sweet!

The stroy was of the first beings, Werewolf: William, Vampire:Kane, and Human. Very good by the way. It also told of naruto's birth, his mother and fathers death, and tied the end of the stroy with the end of THIS stroy, very good, just needs so grammar checking.

LATERZ!

ok so the last part cnfused me but i went back read it a couple of more times and got it. And..and..and..and...it was a good story. :)

*blush*

When Naruto asked Sasuke "What's it called", I thought Sasuke will say "Sex" instead of "Fucking" XD

Poor Werewolf... -A-

Naruto is so innocence huh...? -W-

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Only that? -A-

So short... -3-

Haha I thought Naruto is the werewolf one... And I'm wrong...

Silly me and forgive my stupid brain... XD

Whoa... A vampire Sasuke and a werewolf Naruto...? XD

Nice story!

Omg they are cuzines. well this should have a insect warning. no no then there won't b one of thoes mixed up cartoon cacthes. exalant plot

loved the story!

Ah1 this story made me feel all giddy and jumpy1 Very entertaining1 And when Naruto came out all mutilated, I just felt awful. I very much liked the story.