Great job! *Thumbs up*

Hahahaha, that's so true! The twins always get away with naughty things, but Tamaki doesn't! D;

Great story. Made me laugh. (and Miki seems so cute! _)

hahhahahahaha lolz poor tamaki ! XD

XD Poor Tamaki! When he makes a joke, they take him seriously XD

I didn't read all of the fic, but I just thought I'd say that placing authors notes (ie. "Reference to my Story Kyouya’s Laptop") in the middle of your writing is very off-putting. It draws the reader out of the story and makes your writing very difficult to take seriously, so I would advise against it in future.

A couple of other pointers...

1) You need to start a new line everytime a new character starts speaking.

(For example)

Incorrect-

What are you doing?” she said. The twins smirked. “We just want to have some fun with our toy.”

Correct-

What are you doing?” she said.

The twins smirked. “We just want to have some fun with our toy.”

2) You don't need to use caplocks when a character is speaking emotionally- the use of language and the exclamation marks will portray the feeling of what is being said well enough by themselves. Too much capslock speech can get very annoying. x3

3) Be more careful when using apostrophes- remember,'s is, s possesion.

Example:

Kyouya’s (Kyouya is)

Kyouyas (that is Kyouyas). Eg. Kyouyas girlfriend (NOT "Kyouya’s girlfriend") :)

LOL! Poor Tamaki!