Wow that chapter was dark.

I am very glad I only read your story now for that means I never had to wait for any updates! I think, no I know, it would have killed me! Thank you for a wonderful story, I really enjoyed it. As to the swearing, in my believes all military personnel swear :D. And a lot less than in your story. Even though I never swear (people even make fun of me for that) I only noticed it because it was in your authors note. Thank you again for the story and now I'll start reading the sequel

Ooh the irony! But of course, without there would be no story.
Not sure still if Harrison is on the Na'vi's side or not, he's very loyal. Hopefully he is.
Great story!

And then there were four, five if you count crazy Matsu. Not sure if thats good or bad... Hmmm..
Great details, especially when he slipped into that zone.

Awh dang, too bad they had to fight with the Na'vi. I don't blame them for fighting, they're live depended on it afterall, but it's still too bad they had to it.

Oh my god, for a second I thought he was going to kill her. Go Trudy!

Wow, what a great backstory! Harrison is one tough guy...

Oh my what an interesting fic! I've only read the first chapter and I assure that in about one hour max of me typing this review I will have had the rest finished! This is the first fiction that I have read for Avatar and I choose this one because of its interesting plot. What a marvelous story so far I must say! Thanks for the great read!

Madame Joker

Na'vi don't have soldiers.

Oh the G word. Genocide ain't the right word here. Interesting, get my attention and makes me want to read more.

Great epilogue! Though you were speaking the truth when you said it was more of a bridge to the next story.

I really loved that you fleshed out the scene where Trudy reveals that she's pregnant, and I thought you wrote that scene perfectly with Trudy especially in-character. It was odd to see Harrison all sentimental though.

I also liked how it started up ten years later and we got to see how everything was going on Pandora and take a breath before the next action-packed scenes began. We didn't really get to know Hannah but I have a feeling that'll come in the next story.

And again, I may have mentioned this in my last review, but I liked how Trudy and Harrison didn't just end up falling in love. The whole good friends but also partners in raising a child is cool and unique for fanfic.

I don't have much constructive criticism for you because you usually are so meticulous with your writing and revising, it's hard to find mistakes. Content wise, this epilogue did what you set out for it to do, which was lead us in to wanting to read your next story. I'm going to guess Harrison will be gone for awhile and hopefully we'll get to see what he's going through as well as what's going on with Trudy and Hannah back at home/base.

and so it begins, can't wait to hear how this one plays out :)

Wow! Well that was a whirlwind of a chapter.

This will sort of be a combined review of chapters 9 and 10 because I didn't have anything constructive to tell you about chapter 9. Originally in Chapter 9 when Trudy said "I don't usually fall apart like this" or something I was about to say it seemed like a really stereotypical line for a female character to say, but then the next paragraph where Harrison went into details about the other soldiers crying, I felt it relived the issue. Anyway, other that that little aside, Chapter 9 was very good!

So, Chapter 10 - what to say? Well, I think it was probably the best chapter. I really like how you ended it with them not being in love. Not to say I wouldn't have enjoyed it if they had ended up in love, but I'm glad you took the more unique road (and probably more realistic road - as realistic as it can be taking place in Pandora) by not having them fall competely in love through traveling together. That said, I thought the love scene was well-placed and well-done, especially how it was initiated, etc. Everybody stayed in character throughout the whole chapter, which I'm sure is hard to do when you go from lovemaking to intense battle scenes all in a few paragraphs.

I was pleasantly surprised by ending. When you told me that some of your reviewers had cried from this chapter, I thought sure that upon killing Matsu and returning to Harrison, it would be too late for him and only Trudy would survive. Or that she would give her life for him and he would end up dying anyway. But I'm glad that didn't happen, as the former would have just been sad, and the latter would have almost been cliche.

So - overall, very good. Probably my favorite chapter of the story (though I honestly do not remember the very first couple chapters all that well).

Thank you for a great, well-written story. I will leave your sequel plans up to you!

Great chapter! I also read the earlier chapter you revised and that was very good too. I like that you made Trudy complex... not complacent, very badass, but with other emotions portrayed too. And I liked the part in this chapter where she admitted that Harrison right now is nothing more than her ticket to safety.

Very well written and descriptive as always!

I'll check out Ch. 9 ASAP!

I like how you ended this. I had to read it in two sittings and for the life of me I can't remember why. You did well and although you didn't end this like the romantic in me wanted the romantic in me isn't always right. That being said I'm torn about wanting a sequel. One the one hand Trudy could get together with Harrison on the other it would mean putting these characters through hell again. You can call me a bleeding heart but this is one universe in which I object to putting the characters through hell. I would probably read it so don't get me wrong.

In the end I think I will leave the decision up to you. I know that being busy can wipe you out and discourage personal writing. Decide if you think you could devote the attention you would need to write it.

Great job you blew me out of the water.

TC