Reviews for Bonding with Vegeta
KuramaGirl61 chapter 1 . 3/13/2018
Please continue it's getting good and it's funny D
Guest chapter 2 . 3/20/2014
I think Gohan should be like Picollo and Begeta compared to what I have see in this fanfiction and he should be more powerful too
DBZfanLou chapter 2 . 5/18/2013
Getting real good
vbn45 chapter 4 . 8/3/2010
i love this story! it put a huge smile on my face whenever Gohan said something! Please update and keep the humor coming! ]
embutt chapter 1 . 5/5/2010
Hm, this fanfic has a lot of postitve reviews, which is great for you but I'm afraid my own opinion of it isn't quite so high. Try to take this as constructive criticism though, rather than a flame.

A couple of things I don't like, Gohan acts like a smart-alec jerk, and I also don't find the story very funny, but that's just my opinion. So leaving opinion aside, here's a couple of really easy things that you could do to vastly improve your writing:

Use punctuation, especially when writing the character's speech. It adds enunciation, pauses etc. and breaks the text up, making it easier to read. The reader can currently decipher your writing, but ideally you want the story to be read with ease, and as you intended. Some of Gohan's lines seem to be meant to be read without pauses in one continuous stream, but when every line is meant to be read that way, the device loses it's impact. Try to vary the pace of his lines a bit.

Similar point about Vegeta's lines, almost every single one is in caps, which reads as shouting. I know they guy shouts a lot but again, if he shouts every line it loses impact. Contrasting quiet speech and shouting adds more impact than constant shouting.
Goma-Ryu chapter 4 . 4/6/2010
LOL! I love this story. The fighting between Vegeta and Gohan is the funnest I've ever read. Please continue.
Gold Testament chapter 4 . 4/5/2010
wow ive never read something so random and did vegeta really kill cell
Yaoifangirl102 chapter 4 . 4/5/2010
omg i couldn't stop lauging

and i cant wait to find out whats going to happen next so update soon please
Xj9 chapter 4 . 4/5/2010
Haha! This chapter is so cool. Gohan and Vegeta are so funny together. I hope they will be able to get back soon.. No I hope they'll be stuck there for a while.. Update soon!
Kurami Rocket chapter 4 . 4/4/2010
LOL Funny ass chapter. LAMO. I like how Vegeta and Gohan fight. Ha, can't stop laughing. I thought Goku was going to get mad for the way Gohan was acting. I wonder what the others think of the situation.

And don't worry about it. School is tuff. I'm also having trouble in algebra. I have a C-. So now my mom's making me go to tutoring :P

But, the rest straight A's

:D

Update soon!
GohanSSJ2x chapter 4 . 4/4/2010
so what about cell?
Lilac Marauder chapter 4 . 4/4/2010
That was hilarious! I loved it. Update soon!
Dbz-Diva4eva chapter 4 . 4/4/2010
I love it's so funny please update soon
Kurami Rocket chapter 3 . 2/19/2010
Aw, that sucks :P

Well, good luck on the hw!
Phnxfyr1 chapter 2 . 2/13/2010
Can't wait for more
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