Vampires. Do. Not. Just. Fall. Out. Of. Trees.
Amazing! ;):):)
I couldn’t stop laughing!

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Vampires. Do. Not. Just. Fall. Out. Of. Trees! I have read this story multiple times, and this one of my favorite lines of this story. The comedic timing is absolutely perfect.

I don't know who is the bigger whiny little bitch Bella are last thing she needs is little she needs is someone to slap her upside her head and tell her to grow the hell up,she is eighteen years old not a five year old that lost her favorite teddy bear.

I would love to see one of these stories where they have a family meeting and vote to dismember and burn Eddie if he ever decides to return to the family.

Unless she is suffering from some kind of withdrawls from vampire dazzling she is just an idiot for acting the way she is this story going to be a femslash without the sex scenes?

I do have to say, I love angsty family stories. I find that as everyone's hurt and upset begins to heal, the story makes you feel good. Your story is no different. It works on a premise that I am very fond of, and it does it fairly well. I do, however, have a suggestion.

I feel as if my reading experience is impeded by the repetition of last names and the reiteration of relationships. Instead of referring to Charlie as "Charlie Swan" or "Bella's father, Charlie", just call him by his first name. As fanfiction readers, we know the characters last names as well as their relationship to one another. I understand what you're trying to do (add emphasis and importance), but these things should be used sparingly.

:)

...And Yes... Bella is Still a Doormatt.. Might aswell write "Welcome" on her forehead and scuff your shoes on her face.

Boo! As much as I'm sure some people liked this ending, I find it completely unrealistic that Bella would just take him back. She should have tried to stab him with her spaghetti covered fork, Jasper should have attacked him for making the family suffer. Jasper should have attacked Edward for making him suffer Edward's bloodlust, because we all know Bella is Edward's blood singer. The first thing Charlie should have done was go down and shoot them, exposing their secret.

Other than that, it s'ok.

ZIrvs

This chapter is so sad. I have tears in my eyes already.

Nice.

i love it and u should write another one

It so sad what happened but bella was born on the 13th of september

8/2/2013
i had a dream last night that Bella and Edward had broke up and that was after breaking dawn part 2 and it was ok not the best dream

that is a good ending so well done u