3 choices my ass. He only had 1 choice. Option 1 and 2 are death. Could have done better on them. Beside that everything else was good.

Ah, I can’t finish it. I’m sure lots of people like it, from what I can see in the comments. It’s just too... I guess I’d say “childish”? For me. The writing makes me think more along the lines of more modern children’s novels. Some are really really good, but others are just “eh”. You have too much going on and it’s just not something I like personally. There’s a lot of explaining things instead of letting the actions of the characters tell the story and it comes off wrong to me. Plus the characters themselves are just too OC for my tastes. Especially Kurama. Don’t get me wrong, I’m not trying to put you down or anything, by all means, keep writing and improving. I’m sure you have plenty of loyal followers that will be there for you every step of the way.

Great story.

btw u can download ur files from the site.

The ocarina of Time is my favorite Zelda game so reading this is amazing for me. I would like to mention though that a salamander is an amphibian.

I'm dropping it. Everything seems too artificial, things are explained after the fact in a manner of oh by the way that reminds me of kids trying to trump each other's imaginary characters over which one is more awesome...

Content wise the first two chapters did not offer me anything that gained me any trust in this being a story for me.

I look forward to seeing your progression in future stories however. Mostly because your concepts are interesting.

So in English is it Taimu Kohaku, or Kohaku Taimu?

sasuke is not a traitor if anything almost everybody betrayed him

This one is good what's your next one

Awesome story. I LOVE IT!

Too much suspension of disbelief, and too much information packed into your chapters. You should ease your reader in these things and not jam them down our throats. A couple of paragraphs and poof you changed the entire Naruto back story.. Smh

it's not much of a choice, when you don't give the "hero" a choice a to begin with...

you lost me as soon as you wrote "kileena the queen of time, the girlfriend of the sage"
you've got to be kidding me...

That was totally awesome!
I love the way you kept Naruto and may as a two people relationship, because a lot of authors who write these kinds of stories ruin them by making them a harem.

HAHA poor poor Kimimaro being called the bone guy