THAT CREEP GRRRR

Honestly, it's decent, but the wording and the dialogue feels forced and unatural. No person acts really acts this way; this problem is common because writers are too focus on expressing their idea istead shaping an interesting character. Characters are not centred around tropes but rather real motivations and flaws. Keep going though; you might get far with what you have.

I loved it sooo much please do more.

Great reading great story men

You are the master of this. You should make more.

awesome!

OMG I'm like having happy tears! Amazing job from beginning to end without a doubt 3 DAN & RUNO FOREVER !

its really short

I cannot believe the story ended so early ( even tho it was a magical ending and really interesting , if I may add) .
Plz write a sequel ( if possible) I mean , you had left alot of loopholes and I thought that there must be a sequel and I am already excited about that . Even if there wasn't I'll stay excited cz i got the ending I wanted .
Thanks for updating& keep up the good work !:)

Woohooo! I can't believe this is over now. I absolutely loved it, Dan is such an amazing kind hearted, loving guy. I just loved his speech at the end, it was so romantic and sweet and finally they are together. :) :) :)

*doing a little happy dance*

So sad to see it end but I loved the ending. Good riddance to hydron. Loved it.

Let me tell you now that I love Bakugan. I own the original series and all the games. I found this story , read the first chapter and wow. Its really interesting and I see that there are 22 chapters. This will keep me occupied for a while.

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Great chaptes so far. I'm hope the resistance wins.

Great story I'm still reading the rest of the chapters but I hope you update soon.

it was amazing!