HA! *chuckles softly while typing* The last line got me, I pretty much spit my orange juice (yes I was drinking some O.J while reading) all over the place when I got to it. My mom is going to kill me. ANYWAY, it was a nice short story.

Thank you SO MUCH for this! I was having a "beat-myself-up-about-what-I-don't-have" moment when I came across this. You just made me feel so much better about myself. Thank you!

so CUTE!

HAHA XD she gotcha len! what did she catch him for?

haha XD "And what kind of 'tutoring would that be?" Oh, she caught . hahahhahahahahaha XD and wierd ending but funny i mean "Len: ... you better not let any other guy touch my Rinny in your next fanfics." hahahhahahahaha XD i was thinking that and awww he said my Rinny 3

Awwwwwww sooooooooooo cute!:D lol loooooooved it hahahahaa

Oh, she caught me. Crap.

LMFAO That's pure WIN. x3

That was adorable! (Yay overuse of exclamation points). Anyways the last line was priceless! You're a good writer too. The only problem I had was that some parts felt rushed, but oh well. Keep up the good work _

Hehehehe nice! *thumbs up*

I'm usually not a fan of first-person stories, but I honestly really enjoyed this. x3

I can imagine Rin and Len being in this situation. Haha. Nice job!

cute fic!

about the "dialogue" in the beginning and end... don't worry about it much. to be honest, even though i don't use it, i think it's totally fine. i've seen lots of and lots of fics with that, and i kinda like them since it adds to the humor aspect the ones that REALLY shouldn't be allowed on FF are the ones where the whole fic is in script format.

And for the pov changes, those are totally fine. especially when the sections are short, it'd be extremely hard to know who's talking. if it were switching by chapters, then that may be a different story, but it still works (takes 'my vocaloid' and 'once upon a seashore' for example)

good job and keep it up! :)

Welcome to fanfic

OMG! I love I don't fly, it made me cry!

Anyways great job for your frist fanfic

Keep up the good work

Welcome to fanfiction. I must say it wasn't that bad. (I'll admit: I know Vocaloid for four days) Let's start. Don't talk to your self at the end and beginning. Chatroom style wasn't in the rules and author note aren't made for that. Second. Don't write pov. Writing should be clear enough for readers to understand that.

I hope that I wasn't harsh, but these are the rules. Plus I could say something about grammar, but it wasn't that bad.