I agree with Call-Me-Cassandra, you need to work on your punctuation and grammar, even a little bit of your spelling. The story plot is good and interesting, but you could go onto a bit more detail. You also repeated a few words during the sex scene. 'Hard. Fast.' You could do without repeating those constantly. Or rather than leaving as a single thought, make them into an actual sentence. Have someone beta your stories, they'd be a lot better.

Probably the wrong thing to be focused on...but your punctuation is terrible. I feel like I would have enjoyed the storyline and smut, but as soon as I would start to get into it, there would be a lack of an apostrophe (especially in names like "Harry's") which started to drive me a little mad after about the third time it happened. Also, generally quotations are surrounded by "this", not 'this'. Sorry to be picky, but I feel that you could be a much more solid author if you payed more attention to the craft of writing itself. Even just running your drafts through a spell check program or asking a beta to proof-read would be extremely helpful.

HOT!

Cute.

good!

very hot!

Wow! That was HOT! Nice work )