So cute!

hey girl

i am so sorry about your grandma ...

anyways this was sweet but now not to be mean

you should rework it a little

you made some little mistakes

one is

needs look in his thesaurus... there seems to be missing a word

and further down you have as when and makes no sense

pm me if you want me to tell you more

but i loved the end and the way the wedding was written :)

liked it.