Very well done, few have the literary ability and know-how that you displayed in this work. congrats.

Well you wrote it very well. The characters were well done and in character, you know, until Aoki broke character and started to respond to her. But that's whatever. Not bad overall. Decent lemon.

Your author's note almost makes it sound like you don't want praise or positive reviews, but I'm going to give them to you anyway (in as generic a manner as I can, just for you).

Kudos, nicely done. I wish it was longer (and far more detailed), but it's a nice perspective on an anime I just stumbled upon myself.

The content was good, but you could expand your diction. Try using something like a thesaurus next time. Varying your use of definitive language could really make or break a story. Other than that, being a dirty pedo and all, I really enjoyed this story.

Aw that was cute 3

I wish you would continue this into a full story.

This was pretty good, but I have a few suggestions.

1) The term "adolescent" isn't usually used to describe anyone under the age of 13.

2) I'd say that Daisuke's hair is black as opposed to brunette, and it got a bit annoying reading "the blonde did this" or "the brunette did that" over and over.

3) The characters seemed a little OOC in the dialogue, possibly because Rin usually calls Daisuke Aoki-sensei and he calls her Kokonoe. And it also seems like he's just a little too sexually knowledgeable for a virgin ;]

Other than those minor things, though, I liked this story~

I feel like such a pervert and I kind of want to repremand Daisuke for doing that. He should know it's wrong...I should know it's wrong. And yet...and yet... I loved it!

It's so odd wanting something and then realising how wrong it is... isn't it? (you wrote it so you should know the feeling, right?.)

I read this a while back but skimmed it again for memory purposes and decided to leave a review. Congrats on being the only person to write a non-yaoi/yuri M-rated fan fic about Kodomo no Jikan who kept Rin in her loli state (btw you do realize she is only one year under the japanese age of consent, so Daisuke would only have to wait a year and it be legal). So sad there aren't more brave people. Oh, on a side note anyone else getting annoyed with the huge amount of yaoi/yuri fics clogging the searches? (just for heteros I suppose). Anyways I think they should add another search funnel for yaoi, yuri, and hetero. It make things a lot easier. Anyways nice story.

Very sweet. Aoki/Rin is one of my favorite pairings. I adore them. But this story is too sweet, too innocent compared to some of the more graphic Kodomo no Jikan hentai doujinshi.

By the way, Rin's hair is more like strawberry blonde or light brown but not blonde.

This is great story. Your writing style , using the word man alot, is a little annoying though...

I must say, this was really good.

And I agree with everyone else, you should make a sequel to this!

But, I must point out, Rin doesn't really have 'parents', she has her older cousin, Reiji.

Sugoi~! I wish i could write an AokixRin story like that, your a great writer!

Arigatou

This story just begs for a sequel. Would you please write one or was this just a one time thing?

I liked it! d(_)b Although I don't think girls have crotches, you know. :/ But it was nice. ;) good job!