Woah! Amazing one-shot!

Wow that was great, I loved it.

Oh my Gosh, this is great! I didn't expect it because the chapter was so short, but I'm pleasantly surprised!

Its sorta sad...but i love it!

This story that you wrote was absolutely amazing. I cant believe someone wrote something so heartinspiring. And, how you just read Allen was crazy. You totally deserve to be a writer. Wow, just wow.

That was amazing.

Short but very powerful.

Thanks for sharing this !

Aww...poor Allen...

Not bad. Not bad at all.

I like the "mask theme", since it suits Allen so well.

I think the last sentence was the best "Allen Walker never truly existed"

Ironically there never was a person named "Allen Walker" to begin with. Just the boy who started to show everyone what they wanted to see in him and all that.

"Because he is an entertainer" I think I liked that most of your work. It suits him well and after all he worked together with Mana as a Clown, an entertainer, so maybe it is all he can do (and his Innocence is called God's Clown, that is quite the telling name there!).

The part with Leverrier is a good one, too, though I don't like it really that much. I don't think Allen would really want to let some kind of twisted creature inside of him take over his body, only to entertain Leverrier. I'd rather say he can't withstand the power of the 14th since he is not 'truly and existing person'. But well, that's just my point of view.

And oh, you portrayed Lenalee just the right way. She doesn't want protection but she wants to protect. Most of the time she's portayed as the one needing protection, but she only wants it from her older brother, Komui.

So, to wrap it all up... You really did a great, great job! I'll definetly read your other work.

Hugs 'n' Cookies,

Moyashi C

Excellent drabble, I must say. I know the 'mask' theme well, as I use it for Allen. A lot. :) But really well written, and I love the theme.

Very good for a first fic, as well!

Ooh how philosophical! That last part makes him sound a bit like Lavi though. Really cool fanfic though :)

Awesome! I find myself really loving those stories which go in-depth more into the characters' inner thoughts - like a facade.

Goodluck on your work/studies/stories.

XL.

Wow. I really, really like this story. Great perception and insight, and I love the inner thoughts. Way to break out of the mold of what Allen is. Great job. *applauds you*

*stamps approved* Not that it means much, but I do indeed love this story.

-Kiyoko

I quite like the concept (:

wow deep but at the same time i love great job!

Good grammar, spelling and flow. This would make a great intro to a multi-chapter fic, I think. But it's your work. I like it.