another chapter please

adorable
ah,sweet cant wait what happen next

I wonder whatt the creampuff and admired have anything to do with Sena's problem.. if it is indeed... Uhm, I'd really love to read more, so if you have any spare time, please continue! At any rate, thanks for writing this down! x3

nice thinking about sena when he was little makes me wanna hug him to death o please update soon i really wanna know what happens next :):)

So who is this person that is sending Mamo-nee the cream puffs? I hope Sena will get the answer he want.

3 Keep it up, this so very cute! Love it!

The flashback was so cute~ Every time the cat came up, Ichigo from Bleach always popped into my head, even though the cat was a girl! XD Anyway, the flashback itself was very captivating. It flowed so well and I really appreciated the attention to detail.

Poor Sena...everyone's beginning to suspect that he's a closet case...which he is of course. Although, I'm curious as to whether this will be straight Hiruma/Sena...or there'll be a horde of suitors chasing after the little guy. Honestly, I'm all for a dog-pile on Sena...but he probably wouldn't appreciate that. XD

Waah~ So cuuute! I really love this so far C:

Oh this is very interesting! I wonder what is goin to happen next! Poor Sena just lost and confused!

This was hilarious, it's like one of our conversations at school, the one explaining how yaoi is for girls as yuri is for boys, but more funny cause there's a potential couple in the group! Sweet, keep it up!

Hrmmm... Nice story! Sena'a just so cute and innocent! (And I agree that he's the perfect uke) And it would be just like Hiruma just to use it as blackmail on Sena...

I also noticed that the title, Betrayed by creampuffs, basically deals with Mamori, and yet it's a HirumaxSena fic. (Which is what made me curious about the story in the first place) The Japanese in the beginning caught me off guard, but it wasn't too much of a turn-off as it seemed to stop as the story went on. (Trust me, too much Japanese can really turn off a lot of readers) But other than that, I'll be eagerly awaiting the next update for this story and seeing how Sena deals with his 'I wish he'd see me as an adult-turned gayness'.

Anywhoo~ Very nicely done!

plz update soon

The story was pretty darn funny but there were a lot of typos and Japanese sayings. You might want to add footnotes to clear those up for your readers.

Woot! Please update soon! This is so awesome!

Cute fic! I have some somewhat critique-ish advice for you, though.

Never, and absolutely never put in random romaji Japanese words in the fic. It makes it seem amateurish, like everyone in the fic is just a fangirl showing off her Japanese skills, and it indicates that everyone was speaking english, while adding some Japanese in their speech. I used to do that with my fanfics, and I didn't get good replies because of it.