Very beautiful story, wonderfully written. It makes total sense that Dastan would have had trust issues at first after being taken in by the king and you portrayed that extremely well. Great character study on Dastan and the whole royal family! Loved it!

Huh. Never seen the movie, but I liked the writing. I do with Dastan had been a little better, though.

Is there any continuation? I really enjoyed reading this piece. Really grasped the characteristics or each characters and able to potray them quite splendidly.

Excellent prequel to the movie. It captures Sharaman's mindset perfectly and ties in very smoothly with the gentle lecture he delivers to Dastan soon after the initial victory at the start of the film. Great work!

This needs a sequel... Like what are Sharaman's thoughts about Dastan marrying Tamina, or what the two princes and King would think when he'd declare he'll only marry her even before he marries her, or why and how he fell in love when he was to marry her for political reasons, and stuff like that.

Great progression, and I love the ending.

Awesome oneshot :D

fascinating, sharp, and funny. :)

If sacred mission's bane was the Future!fic I longed for, this is the pre-movie Dastan story I didn't look for but am extremely pleased I found.

It's beautiful how you've subtly given us the very, very believable transition of street rat to awkward prince to Uncomfortably More Royal. I was surprised, pleasantly so, to read of Dastan's aptitude for law which I love you for putting in - the rationale for it is marvellous and in-character. His ups and downs of growing up - Ah, that girl he left behind - and Bis' unspoken loyalty really add polish to this gem.

And that last line. THAT LAST LINE. It killed. UTTERLY. If this is shorter than my other two messages, it's because I would overuse the words "briliant" and "I loved it". So please accept my thanks again and my heartiest kudos for your writing. It was a thrill and a joy to read your work. :)

This was a great story! I really liked it. :)

I really liked this; I think you got the brothers down very well, and the last bit was especially good, with the king wondering about his decision to take Dastan in.

Interesting look at this unusual family dynamic.

I like seeing inside the minds of Dastan & his father

Great storytelling & God bless

I wish this story had a better ending than the sudden chopping off that you left us with. I do appreciate it in the sence that it's a good stopping place, but you've dangled too many loose ends. I would like to see further thoughts on Dastan's character and how it may have changed after the seige of Alamut. But perhaps not.

I enjoyed this piece. Thanks for writing it.

Wonderful. I love little Dastan. He is too sweet and caring for words.

I also love grown up Dastan. And I love his jumping.

I thought it was great how you wrote his thoughts and how Dastan first couldn't believe.

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