that was good. it was a little hard to read but it was a great story.
Draco122

ya it had a good story line... but im going to be blunt... the grammar was bad... and the thing is they started to cry to much... im sorry but they cried to much to quickly... but hey everyone makes a bad one and then next they make the best one ever d'_'b - dude with thumbs up

Very good one, love this :)

Although short, it was decent. You may want to get a beta-reader though...quite a few grammar mistakes.

The plot and layout of the story is amazing, just work on the grammar and spelling and it'll be great ;D

I'm fighting the urge to cry it was so beautiful

I liked it, was perfectly fine.

I think it has potential, but there were too many grammatical mistakes and spelling errors for me to really pay attention.