love this ...

This was such a lovely story to read. I love the romance and how you really took your time to let it develop and how we saw Sesshomaru's inner dialogue as he fell in love with her. The adventure aspect and storyline were also great and very believable!

It took me 2 days to read this book and I love it! About go start on the sequel!

Great story. A beautiful ending too. You did a good job at writing it. The grammar and spelling was great. Sesshoumaru is not too OOC, only slightly I think, thank you for trying to maintain his character. The mature scenes were good too. Although, I think you should revise them, make them run more smoothly.
Are you sure this story is still T rated? Might wanna look into the rating description.
I love that you did not rush the story and let them built their relationship.
Thank you for sharing your story. Overall a great story. Well done (w)

Minako annoys me on so many different levels. I believe you tried so hard not to make her a Mary Sue that you accidentally made her an anti-sue, a character with absolutely no redeemable qualities. Demonising Masami is just childish on her part because so far she hasn't done anything worthy of being treated the way she is. It just seems like this story paints women to be petty, small minded beings who turn against each other over a man.

Such a beautiful ending to a beautiful story.

Instead of feeling sympathy for Minako or even pity, I often find myself annoyed with her. She never thinks of anything other than the male she's interested in and is constantly in a state of self pity.

It happened again.
First, it said Minako watched the couple from the it switched to Minako watching them from the roof.
Why does this fanfic keep contradicting itself?

Masami said that she wants to see Sesshomaru's castle, which she said he keeps hidden. But then, in the next paragraph, Masami says she worked in Sesshomaru's castle as a servant.
They can't both be true.

The fight scene in this chapter wasn't very well written.

You know, in Romanian 'Mina' means 'Mine'. So every time Sesshomaru calls her that, he's calling her mine unintentionally! XD

When it comes to romance, it's hard to know when Sesshomaru is OOC, so I'll go out a limb and say that you did a pretty good job with it. It think you interpreted everyone's canon personalities pretty well.

Wow you did such a great job at writing and telling this story

actually, Sesshomaru is somewhere between 450 and 200. It gives hits all over the anime to the characters ages. Inuyasha is somewhere around 150

Alright! I'm finally finished. Took me about 4.5 hours to read from start to finish.
Let me start by saying that, at the beginning I really didn't like this story. It was very VERY rushed and Minako was a very annoying character to have to read about. I thought a few times about quitting and finding something else to read but part of me kept saying "Give it a chance Dani, give it a chance!"
So I read on and I gotta say, the story eventually had me hooked! As terrible as the start of the story was (in my opinion) it did get noticeably better.
For starters, it became less rushed as it went on. I do understand the struggles of fan fiction and how the beginning of a story is always the most difficult to write, so I won't comment any further.
Second, Minako eventually got slightly less annoying. You developed her character very well and towards the end actually pumped to see her fight Masami. I really wish there was more description as to what she actuslly looks like, besides having ears and black hair. What do her ears look like? Is her hair curly, straight, wavy? What kind of ears does she have? I had a hard time picturing what she looked like.
I will however say that I wish there was more drama between Sesshomaru and Haruto. You stuck the part with him in there twice and neither time did you really do anything with his character or the Sesshy x Mina x Haru love triangle. I also would have liked to see a longer fight between Masami and Minako. It lasted a few sentences and then ended, only to pick back up and end just as quickly. (The dragon part was wierd but it's your story and I respect it and it did add a nice touch of uniqueness.)
Sesshomaru was kept in character extremely well and it's rare to see a fanfic where he doesn't spiral out of character like a horrific train wreck. Even if he went a tad OOC towards the end, he was in love and we've never ever seen him in love before so really, he could very well act like that we'd just never know. ;)

Anyway. All in all, I'd totally give this a 8.5/10 if there was a rating system. It has earned a favourite from me as well and I encourage you to keep writing!

(Please note that this is my opinion and many others wkll probably