I wish them well.

As long as SEELE doesn't know about that last line, they should be fine.

SEELE? Shenanigans.
All things come at a price. And Yui would /kill/ for the ability to give that to Ichi.

Something something star crossed lovers.

Awkward does not even begin to describe this. Well played.

I'll /bet/ he's confused.

Adam is not going to be happy when he meets his Allison.

Filed under 'oops'.

The girls would love that. Go-kun, I'm not so sure. He might get jealous.

Your tunes this time seemed more like final battle music. I think the song I was coincidentally listening to at the time fit more; Getting Away With Murder by Papa Roach.

I love ZOE, Anubis kicks ass. If it weren't for the skrew up I'd say Telefrag is the ultimate in armor piercing rounds. Why go through the armor when you can go beyond the armor?

Crazy Awesome is the best. I'm betting that Kiko and Zyuu wanted them to make a strip grenade for them. It will be interesting to read one of the many offshoot stories of ND.

I don't know if this is your first overall fanfic, or just your first (and so far, only) fanfic on the site, but I must say: bravo, excellent job.

While the writing is a little rough in the early chapters and lacking in description at somewhat key points (like character descriptions, which I see you released in the final chapter), the way you wrote the characters involved rendered a fair amount of that extraneous. With the personalities of your characters pretty well defined, the descriptions you gave them only expanded what I got from them. And the later chapters, especially chapter 8, had some awesome descriptions that I really can't actually complain at all.

As for how the story worked... again, great work. Your style of writing for this story really fits well with Gregg Landsman's off-the-wall prose. Characters like Dr. Mondschein really felt like they came right from the generally insane world of "Nobody Dies" - and I mean that in a good way.

Allison's quest to be with Adam was a really nice twist to the format, especially in the world that Landsman provided. This especially applies to chapter 7, which was some great inner turmoil that didn't fall into needless "wangst" that tends to hit so many fanfics these days. Very well-done.

The not-Angels also worked great for the story - a way to provide the traditional Evangelion monster-of-the-time-period format while also making things different from the source material (and source fanfic). I really dug the "origins of the Bible" angle you took, especially as it made for some unique Angel concepts. Never thought a tree would be threatening, honestly.

As ByLanternLight put it below, I have to say that this is a great, compressed little fanfic that tells a fun story and is a pretty cool ride. The epilogue was also quite appreciated, as it really did help to flesh out Adam and Allison even more than you did before.

In all, I'd give it an 8/10. It's not quite perfect (although I'm convinced NO fanfic is perfect), but the ride is more than worth the read. If you put something else onto this site, I'll gladly read it.

So did he get the magic spell from the spellbooks AEE!Ritsuko mentioned giving T!Rei during her trip through the multiverse?

Good story by the way.

Nice Story. I like the comments about needing more Crazy Awesome. So how in canon for Nobody Dies is this?