I didn't like it. Misaki and usagi were entirely out of character. Wayyy to dirty as well.
Hope you improve.
-halo

Very good

It is really good!

Not too shabby, very sexy.

*drool* OMG! I LOVE THIS SO MUCH!

How awesome!

Hi D

I just discovered your fic and let me tell you something, even if it was a oneshot it was great! I found it really sexy and pretty hot ;) I hope you can keep writing fics fromo this awesome couple. Totally a fav :D

TeeHee, misaki is so pervy!

I loved it! Will you continue it?

... i have to say i didnt like this fanfic. it was so not romantic at all. Usami was not the way he always is specially because of the vocabulary you used for him... it was so out of character...

hope you take this in a good way... bye

okay, i think this was a good story, a little 2 erotic for me but that's okay

That was ok for a first timer but you really wanna watch your tenses. When you write in past tense keep it that way. I would highly suggest a beta reader to go over your work. That way you can have someone check spelling, tense usage, grammer, ect. Other than that nice 1st attempt.

.IT!

-fangirls- Loved it, loved it, and loved it! T'was absolutely smexy! Seems more like a PWP than a story with a plot ;3. But hey, it's still good! -gives toffee and bows- Thank you for the chapter and have a nice day~!

I think you should continue writing your perverted stories O uO

nice ! ;o)