Brilliant piece of writing. I don't like the idea of them dying, but it is pretty realistic.

I am not familiar with the series, but your first chapter sets up the potential for some interesting scenes.

Nice! sweet ending... But where the Bitches and Hoes at? lol jk, this was great. I had a feeling this was where you were gonna send it.

It was a bit short for me, but I like long n drawn out cause I have ADD so for me there needs to be a lot going on to keep my interest. But the way you made the time jump forward was not random, and it worked its way together.

You've got some talent youngin, keep at it! try your hand at different styles of writing too! like point of view, or first person, whatever you call it. I get a feeling you could be going places...

awww! very cute! really weird that you updated this now though, I just discovered this Hancock category yesterday XD

dude..its been like three years since you wrote this... put up another chapter lol...

thats it

No more? Awww! Put more!

i want more

Right more!:)love it!

pretty good, you need to do more

Yep...ya betta continue :P

Well I want a second chapter.

Contuine

of COURSE i'm interested! lol