Ahhh that was so good! I love childhood Momo and Shiro and you wrote that so well.
i loved some of your descriptions, so nicely wtitten.
I also highly approve of your watchig of fairy tail

Great story!

Keep writting XD

I loved it! w

Awh so sad :c

that was so cute and so sad! poor shiro is beginning to grow up cold! it is not fair the life he had!

You had a few really powerful lines near the end, especially concerning your anaolgy.

I liked this a lot, actually. You have some really great writing. The imagery was so...clear. The ending was my favorite part, though.

OMG! I like it! no.. I LOVE IT!

Especially the last part! 3 3

Ooohhhhhh... ICE DRAGON! XD

I kinda found an error...

"Whenever he was Momo, time flew by"

Shouldn't this be "Whenever he was WITH Momo"?

And a couple more minor errors here and there, but I don't think that many people will mind those.

I feel bad for Lil' Shiro-chan... Getting beatened up by people he never did anything to... AND THEY CALLED HIM PEICE OF SHIT? THAT IS SO SAD AND NOT NICE!

GO MOMO FOR SAVING TOUSHIROU! GO SCARE THE BULLIE"S BUTTS! XD

Not much to say today,

~RSG

Aww, so sweet, and yet, so sad! I just love stories about Lil' Shiro and Momo when they were younger! I think a lot of people forget that what makes Toshiro seem cold to others is not done purposefully on his part, but caused by years & years of others' abuse and neglect. That's why he likes his Granny, and Momo, because they never told him cruel things, or called him cold, or called him horrible names. I think he has a very sweet personality, if only you can see past all the years of abuse he's suffered. Great story!

it's...it's...so profound..absolute..great..T.T *sniff sniff*..

great job! :D

-jcloud xD

wow you finally finished the thing! how long did it take what 6,8 months? half the year? (BTW this isnt fluffy in ANY way shape or form) BUT at least you finished the damn thing

ahhh I like this story... there need to be more stories about Toshiro's childhood I think :3... really good

Awwww so sad!

I thought it was very interesting. Kind of sad, but still very good as well. Well written, and good working with the prejudices. Poor Toushirou...