Good job.

This is so cute, and I like the foreshadowing.

Great story xD

And lol how easy Sasuke fell for naru

Oh. And amazing how Kakashi always seems to know what's going on )

Oh, I like this. Actually, why can the real Naruto be like that? Usuratonkachi, indeed.

I think I'll stick with this image for now. This Naruto is so much better.

Cheers!

I don't know that this qualifies as a rated "K" fic. There is yaoi-ness and the use of a few words that some may be opposed to. As for me, I could care less. Seeing as how my general choice of fic rating is M. I prefer creativity when it is untamed and unrestrained. Now the reason why you felt that you were unable to "write about undying passion in 2-3 pages" is because your awesomeness is far too great to be contained in such a small amount of space. 2-3 pages seems to me, to be an acceptable length only when it is used for a quick "wham! bam! thank you mam!" type of oneshot. I'm not referring strictly to a lemon, but maybe just an idea or short "drabble" as you said.

As short as this is, you were clever to add Kakashi's point of view at the end. It sort of takes this "drabble" and wraps it up nicely for the reader to read into. By doing this you have allowed for your imagination spill out of the given parameters and created a bigger picture using all of which is left unsaid.

gaaah! this makes me want to kidnap them in their innocent selves and disappear. I wish the writer won't turn Sasuke into an utterly evil man (yet) D: I am so disturbed but this made me smile. but I am awfully sad for the real Sasuke! TT

Drama aside, this was nice :) :) cunning naru-chan :P

Wow, that was a side of Naruto I didn't knew.

It's great how you make both boys interact. Incredible work :)

Keep writing and improving :D

well, you call it shameful, i call it captivating ;) it's all matters of taste.

I liked very much the way you showed the potential of the playing Naruto to turn into a manipulative Naruto, it's really cool and not often done ;)

*giggles* Oh Naruto, your not-so hidden cunning puts Sasuke to shame! D

LOL undying passion in two pages:

"Sasuke and Naruto kissed. They had an undying love for each other. Also they did it on the kitchen table."

I did it in three sentences muahahahahahaha *dies laughing*

awww thats soo cute!

this was really cool. I personaaly don't read this kinda stuff which is why it took me so long to click it in my inbox but i have to tell you it was awesome. Really sweet fic, i must say with underlying truths _

Ok, as you said, its short. Really short A nice story to kill 2-3 minutes. Damn you DA for forcing the authors on this level of writing.

i think this is the shortest story you have ever writte but its still funny and i like it! hehehe, nice work by the way Naruto!

I love how 'slice-of-life' this is, and how you always get Sasuke's character so well ! The way he is very easily manipulated.

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I dearly hope this fic wins, I still don't understand how that other fic ( which I didn't even finish reading ) won.

Good luck !

: D

Just...awwww.