are you adding more chapters?

Great story man I really like Claire she's an awesome character dude please update soon as a favor because it's going to be my birth day in three days so please update oh and this would be a Great episode for Cold case I'm a big fan of the tv show so please I'm begging you please update

great beginning to the story ;) cant wait to see where it goes from here

I can't read this story.

I agree with Til Tomorrow about the quotes.

Maybe check out Til Tomorrow's or my 'Double Crossed' story to see how the quotes are, at least.

Great start! I'm really interested in the case (and the upcoming Scotty/Lilly part)

Just a suggestion though, it would be easier to read if you went to the next line when a new person starts talking.

Other than that, you're doing great! I can't wait to read more, so please update :]