A very long and very dramatic chapter. Rosa is a great character, I love the idea of Chris's kid sister assisting CID. The kidnap is very suspensefully written, but I wish you hadn't let Mac rape Alex. Gene's admission of his love is so sweet! And now, just as I suspected, the kids are in the 80s with Alex. Will Gene know what's hit him?

Lots happened in this chapter. First the rape and then the kids show up. So glad to see the reunion. How will gene cope? Can't wait to find out.

You're developing the Galex relationship beautifully, and I think I've worked out how the kids will get to the 80s - anything to do with that coach crash? And I don't trust Dr Smith either - any more than Alex trusts Mac...

So everyone knows about them and it is official. Can't wIt for the undercover operation to start. Doctor seems freaky.

I hope you're feeling better now.

This is going well! I like Alex's conversations with Supermac- was he really jealous? Is there going to be a Supermac/Alex subplot, even if it's unrequieted? Hmmm...

funny idea with the fake baby bump. almost want them to have a drunken one night stand, get discovered for having a fake baby bump and then the nurse explain that alex is actually pregnant with gene hunts baby...shock for luigi. would gene still get free whisky? that scene was really funny. thanks for upadting and sharing.

Oh please don't kill the kids in a crash, that would be scary and painfull. Unless it exploded on impact and they died instantly. I'm not sure why I'm worried about the welfare of fictional children but hey ho.

Well gwd u so need to complete tis wonderful story...x!

I tink tat the crash on da day trip as somethin to do with da kids enterin da 80's...x!

I tink da fake pregnancy story is a great twist n could get even better...x!

Well gwd so deserves few more chaps...x!

All 3 kids could end up in da 80's n tat would be gwd. Tat could explain why there is still da photo of da 3 of them in Alex's warrant card...x!

I'm so pleased you're writing for Ashes. And I love the split between what's happening in real time and her inner thoughts, how one's calm and professional and the other is crazy. Looking forward to future chapters.

I really like this. Looking forward to seeing how it develops

Holly xx

Following on from series one brings back memories. Can't wait to get the office banter and find out where the kids come into it. Can't wait for a update. Thanks for writing and sharing. :)

I love it :) Please continue.. xx

Doesn't look like you need all that much help :)

This is good! A couple of grammar issues, but it's good writing and I like the little bit at the end with "Big-headed bastard" XD

Keep writing, no problem on the reviews and such!

Jazzola :)

This is a good start! I like it :) Keep writing!

Jazzola :)