Oh gosh I read this back in 2014 and I’ve been going through all my favorited fics and I forgot how much I loved ghost hunt!

I see you edited this in 2018, was surprised.
I would hope for you to make a new lin x mai, i feel like im the only big fan of these two than naru x mai, lol. keep up the good work 3 3

I am usually a naruxmai fan but this was awesome!

That was awesome! Keep up the great work :D

I always though Lin x Mia would be cute... excuse me as I slip into fan girl world...

OMG! not the toast beast! Were all gonna die!

HI there,

I wanted to tell you that you have good potencial and I like it._ ut you should check your grammar, especially puntuation, like comas and periods. Gramatical errors aren't a big deal, we all make them and word can correct some of them. Still, check from repeted words, and like I said, special attention to the comas. Keep up the good work!_

Umm.. How come your repeating what happened in the anime and just adding your own little details here and there. Dont get me wrong, your take on it is good; Im just not too sure why someone would repeat what, chances are, we all seen dozens of times in the anime.

Well im only on chapter 2 ill keep on reading anyhow.

Your doing a good job so far with being diligent.

hey there, i think this is a good start for a retelling but it needs some work and a beta reader to catch your spelling and grammatical errors. you should probibly watch the show to get the lines or read the manga, mai's original speech was much more compelling then the one you told, also spend some time with your characters, make them love you and the people reading it love them ya.
i also think your going a wee bit to fast, even if it's just a recap of what has happened in the show. take your time and spin yourself into the story line, even if your using someone elses words you'd be serprised at how much you can make your own. read File One: Evil Spirits All Over by Ali Gokey she's an excilant example of this.
i'm not trying to be mean and if you think that i have been i'm sorry. just thought some constructive critisisum would do you some good. keep it up.

WHAT? no happy ending for me...y? im heart broken here...

Aww thats sad! I love them together :)

holy molly... what the hell juust happend... shocked... super shocked... that being said lol nicely done cant wait to read more. cloudslover

Gooood suspense, but spelling and punctuation still need work.

so cool! ) thanks for updating! )

Sweet Lin and Mai moment! Can't wait to read on! I love the moments between Lin and Mai cause they're sooooo cute! Keep it up .