WHAT THE **** IS THIS BULL ****

.. i severely hope this gets a proper re-wright the lack of detail and everything else is atrocious the grammar is decent though ,the paceing is far to fast as well this could be a amazing story if it was reworked and done properly preferably if it was done paragraph style and not bullet point

I glad you are back and you this is a very epic chapter that for sure. Yami made Caboose her boyfriend didn't she. Also you going to read my stories?

Dang! This is a massive complicated story! Now, I would normally review in this space. But i'll be damned if I can't be bothered! There is way to much to analyze to make a full review, so I'll just say it was good. Just wanted to let you know I DID read this story! So update thanks! ;D

Chibi Naruto now too? *facepalms self* _

This is a very epic chapter that for sure.

Okay, so for me, this story gets a mixed review. I found the story, and I liked what I saw. An extremely powerful Naruto, the best thing since toast. The problem was, things went from great, to bad, to worse. The spelling seemed to get worse, and words were missing. Not to mention the utter weird and craziness of the story. I think it may be because you might have teamed up with a bad speller. :P No offense, it is but what I have seen. I was going to give up on the story, as it went bad, bet then it got a hell of alot better.

The spelling improved, less missing words, and not to mention very awesomely big chapters! I was excited again. The chapters where made to have more of a base, the powers of naruto's improved tenfold, and it wasn't weird anymore like the time when you tried a hand at a comedy.

Anyways, the story is now alot better than it deteriorated into, and so it is now a marvelous story. I appreciate all your hard work, but there is but one thing I need you to do...

UDPDATE!

XD

my complaints regarding previous chapters are now gone, as far as i am concerned all previous chapters are replaced to more logically fit into a story where this is the real begining, everyone just seems more natural with each other in this chapter. it works.

seems a little jumpy, things that really should have been drawn out happen suddenly and also how does naruto know if he loves her, they met like that day, and how has hinata always loved him, as i said from your timeline they first met that day. also where is kushina for all this, will naruto ever thank his father for making it so a hottie has no choice but to sleep with him for the rest of his life, and why are a 12 year old arranged marraige couple living together before the cerimony (to get to know each other?)

overall looks fun, but it just feels like a 12 year old on meth wrote it.

NICE JOB ON THIS CHAPTER! I JUST GOT TWO QUESTIONS... 1) WHY THE HELL DID THEY THINK IT WAS A GOOD IDEA TO DO THAT TO NARUTO? AND 2) IS DARKRAY FRICKING ANTISEBMITIC OR SOMETHING?

Keep going.

THis is a very epic chapter that for sure.

NOW THIS IS GETTING GOOD!

This is a very epic chapter and also I feel sad about what happen to your Grandpa.

I'm sorry about your grandpa. Keep up.

NICE WORK! IT WAS WORTH THE WAIT!