This is sad, yet sweet all at once. I can't wait to see where this goes. c:

This is turning out to be a really interesting plot line; definitely set up the exposition for the story, it's a bit confusing, but this story could go to very interesting places!

Wow, Terra has a chance to come back!

Sorry Xemnas. If you two fight, you don't stand a chance. (

Or maybe they'll work out some compromise.

Hmmm...I feel like Terra had a hand in causing this whole situation or at least knew it would happen.

Update soon!

i wasn't too surprised to find out Terra was the reflection. though, i thought it might've been Xehanort for a moment.

short, but interesting chapter. what was Terra talking about when he mmentioned 'waiting for something'?

i have a question, why exactly is this story called 'Felt'?

but nice chapter. Xemnas is feeling Terra's love for Aqua himself. and apparently... Terra had been sleeping with Aqua the night before... oh dear.

Well, I don't know where to start. There's so much that I want to point out and so much that I need to elaborate on, which is why this review will be divided in sections. Be mindful that I really want to help you. With that said...

Grammar,

This is where you fall short most of the time. You shift your verb tenses a lot, and string a couple of sentences in each paragraph with a run-on.

Ex. "The brunette looked so familiar to Xemnas he couldn't figure out what his own connection to this man was."

The space in between 'Xemnas and he' needs to be replaced with a period.

Edit: The brown-haired man looked so familiar to Xemnas. He couldn't figure out what his own connection to this man was.

Another Ex. "His subconscious mind showing him images of familiar faces to him, Xemnas saw a bluenette woman looking to be in her early 20's she stood next to a fourteen year old boy, the boy looked like his subornate, Roxas and other side of the attractive female, stood a tall brunette man; he as well looked to be in his early 20's."

That's an ENTIRE run-on in which the phrase 'early 20's' was used twice.

Edit: His subconscious showed him images of familiar faces. Xemnas saw a blue-haired woman that appeared to be in her early twenties. She stood next to a fourteen-year-old . . . a subordinate . . . He quickly recalled the blond-haired boy - Number XIII, Roxas."

As you can see, I didn't finish the revision. I'm leaving that part to you. I also fixed the verbs for you. Try to stick with the past tense next time.

Terminology,

One of the first errors that came to my mind was 'bluenette'. That's not an actual word and it's never used for the silly, little reason of its own obscurity. You also called Terra a 'brunette'...Terra's a man. :) Men aren't called 'brunettes'. That's what brown-haired women are called. And this may be ignorant-sounding, but I'm pretty sure that 'nette' is probably a Latin word that specifies the gender of a woman.

I studied French for four years in middle school and high school, so I know for a fact that Latin languages distinguish men from women. In your case, the word 'brunette' is of the equivalence of 'brune', but brune isn't a proper English word. So, you would use 'brown-haired man'.

Style,

A story is well-suited when it has a theme or writing style that it can lean on. Your theme was intensity, so your writing style was meant to be intense and angsty. Try to sneak Xemnas' voice into your writing, and make it sound exactly like the character.

Writing is like music. Once the song plays, it paints a broad picture for the listener. Writing is no different.

Characters,

Another thing that I want you to work on is a proper back story. If this was a prologue, it could've explained Xemnas' character completely.

Story (*SPOILERS*),

This is where I'm a little confused. From what I understand, Xemnas is having immediate dreams of Aqua and Ventus, and he still has Aqua's lucky charm?

That doesn't sound right at all. At this point, Xemnas wouldn't have any memories of Aqua and Ven. At the end of Birth by Sleep, Master Xehanort actually possesses Terra's body and extracts his heart. Terra's heart takes control of Terra's armor. So quite literally, Master Xehanort becomes Terra and ends up fighting his armor. There was barely anything left of Terra after that battle.

And from then on . . . well, you know . . . Xehanort/Terra became Ansem's apprentice. He later betrayed Ansem and became absorbed in the darkness of his heart. His heart gave birth to a 'heartless' and a nobody...and yada, yada, yada... Now that I explained that, it's really hard for me to understand WHY Xemnas would be able to remember Aqua and Ven.

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With all of that taken care of, I wish you the best of luck. I hope that this helped in some way. I've spent quite a while on this review.

Sincerely,

JJB

Ah, so they're Keyblade Masters now? And they have apprentices? Furthermore, Terra's a master? Very interesting.

Hmm...wonder if we'll run into Ventus.

Update soon!

:O And you would think that he would be satisfied with a heart...Talk about selfish! Haha, great chap though, updated a lot sooner then I expected...But then again, I'm a slow updater. P

o_o Great chapter! Loved the suspense and drama. Wish I could write llike that! P

Can't wait for the next chap! Just what exactly is going on!O

This is a very original idea you've come up with. Xemnas is in Terra's body, but not back in the past (that's what I thought you meant at first when you talked about it in KHI). It's in the present somehow, with him and Aqua being in their 30s.

And Aqua shares a bed with him? I have a feeling we might see some lemon. D

Update soon! I can already tell this story'll be great!

Wow this sounds really interesting, i hope to read more soon.

interesting start. i'm only saying 'interesting' because, like Xemnas, i don't really have a clue what's going on.

but i'm looking forward to reading more.

okay. catch ya later!