There were some punctuation errors, but very few grammatical and/or spelling errors. I really liked this story, and I look forward to reading any others of yours.

Hahaha, I love the ending. I don't know, but this is so hot yet so swet... Good job you had ;)

that was so great and full of HOLY HOTNESS!

Great work u know everytime i see a himawarchan and watuniki story i see domki kicking her ass no offnes i find domwan very hot :) cookie is the shape of yaoi give

:p yup i liked it wished i knew what doumeki was doing at the moment o.0

ew. that was brobably the most uncomfatable night like, ever! but that would be aweful to have that happen to me. not that i don't want SOMENE ELSE t do that to me... ;3

A really hot show :whistles low: Damn, Watanuki, you could sell tickets ;D Though Doumeki would disagree most vehminately, I'm sure.

YYWKMN.

So funny, so pervy and Watanuki is just ummm so Watanuki, you could make another chapter now with Doumeki's POV please, please.

LOVED IT! Absolutely fantastic story!

i like the idea you use in this fic. the connection douwata had between their eyes AND jerking off in front of mirror just...lewd! and deliciously hot!

WRITE MORE! YOU SHOULD NOT LEAVE IT THERE!

XD Watanuki is crazy...but I love him. I like how Doumeki was acting like nothing had happened up until he whispered in Watanuki's ear. :)

love the ending

OMG!

please, may we have some more?

That. was. so. HOT. I could totally imagine Doumeki going internally crazy to Watanuki watching himself masturbate! Doumeki had to have known that anything he says is going to swirl around Watanuki's mind until it he just has to do something about it. x)